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Raiding the Darkness
Contributed by
merry
on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 07:38:17 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Left to ponder my own thoughts
Annihilate one another
Indecision engaged in battle
Reason is once more lost
Did I hear Gods name again?
I watch the river flow
Taking comfort in it being
Nothing more or less than a river
If only I were water
Eating the last crumbs
As if hunger will go away
Never satisfied it keeps returning
Demanding to be fed again
If I were the river I would flow
Cold and fast from the mountains
To my lover the sea
Tasting the sweet salt of life
My tongue forever satisfied
Hurdling into darkness
Headlights beam invades
Darkness gives up her secrets
Blackened domain of shadows
Nightmares greasy realm
Icy grip of terror clamps down
Imitating death
If I were the river I would be silver
And you could not see me
Hissing down my neck your breath
Stings my pale and tender flesh
Blinded by your great eye
Peering from behind
Grinding gears and teeth
Thrashing four wheel drive
If I were the river I would beckon you
Sing a siren song
Then swallow you alive
Copyright ©
merry
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2004-11-14 19:38:17]
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Re: Raiding the Darkness
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 08:22:49 PM AEST
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I am in awe of this write Gaille. You always amaze me but this one.......wow. It gives me chills......
Roses at your feet
Larry |
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Re: Raiding the Darkness
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 14th November 2004 @ 08:49:41 PM AEST
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Awww wow hun, this is amazing! Definitely has me looking over my shoulder. I love it :o)
Love 'n Hugs
- Becca |
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Re: Raiding the Darkness
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by ShadowDaughter on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 12:33:33 AM AEST
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| Wow, this is wonderful . . . beautifully written, flawless. Now excuse me while I end this comment to go read it again. |
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Re: Raiding the Darkness
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 15th November 2004 @ 09:37:05 AM AEST
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WOW....and wow again!!
merry, this is so well done. It moves with purpose and flow from begining to end.
Awsome job! |
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Re: Raiding the Darkness
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by Stitch on
Saturday, 20th November 2004 @ 11:45:48 AM AEST
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Whenever I see your name on the site, I rush to see what you have written. You never disappoint me.
Stitch |
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Re: Raiding the Darkness
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 10:18:25 AM AEST
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this is excellent gaille, beautiful as always:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Raiding the Darkness
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by Archie on
Sunday, 1st May 2005 @ 03:03:09 PM AEST
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| Great poem. You have a gift for imagery |
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Re: Raiding the Darkness
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by Spike on
Friday, 31st December 2010 @ 05:07:26 PM AEST
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G'day Merry.
a terrific, brooding contemplation - both within and regarding the exernal elements. A truly compelling and familiar thought pattern, wrapped in your compact wording and rich imagery.
Happy 2011, poet. |
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