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Loves Midnight
Contributed by
eyesxcriedxout1989
on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 04:24:10 PM in AEST
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Two lovers
Run through midnight
Freely, freely, endlessly
Dancing through shadows like curtains
Casting over diamond waters
Like her eyes of crystal
He gets lost in them
While kissing away every oppurtunity
Every tear
The moon turns her grey face
And an ancient smile cracks her lips
While the lovers run
Through midnight shadows
The shadow of this world
In its precious coma
Yet awakened, were they
And they danced
Running, kissing, dancing
Through loves midnight
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Re: Loves Midnight
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by TheRaven on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 04:32:42 PM AEST
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not bad, not bad at all. i love the overall theme. somewhat dark and mysterious, but the love is nevertheless apparent. great job.
the raven |
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Re: Loves Midnight
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by recompile on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 04:37:12 PM AEST
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| very nice impromptu -- makes me wonder what you'd have done had you edited :) |
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Re: Loves Midnight
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by BlindSuicide on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 04:42:40 PM AEST
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Awwww so sweet. Great write didnt suck at all :)
~Alucia~ |
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Re: Loves Midnight
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by theMoth on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 07:07:59 PM AEST
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I honestly really liked it.
Now you are even giving Dane
a run for his money.
Go get 'em!
--Mothy |
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Re: Loves Midnight
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Tuesday, 16th November 2004 @ 09:45:27 PM AEST
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| oh thanks mothy, some friend you are!!!!!!!!!!! but it was good, this was a great impromptu write, though you have a ways to go before you reach me, hahaha, actually that's not true, i have always seen you as an equal. great stuff here, keep it up!!!!! |
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Re: Loves Midnight
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by EVERxSOxSWEET on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 04:19:56 PM AEST
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that did not suck mason! i liked it! your such a good writter i love reading your stuff.. keep up the great work and stop sayin your things suck cuz they are awesum! :-p
Kaylee |
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Re: Loves Midnight
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by FleurdeSang on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 04:56:05 PM AEST
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Ah, Mason... We are our own worst critics, no? This did NOT suck one bit! As a matter of fact, it was absolutely flawless... I love this piece! And you should be very proud of it. It's beauty shows brilliantly, the images so real, the love is felt, so fervent.... Exquisite piece, dear Mason! Short yet compelling, enchanting till the very end... The midnight dance was beguiling...I felt as though I could see the lovers waltz their tale of their eternal love... Tears of joy flood my eyes... May you dance with her forevermore, my friend! Excellent piece! Pen on, precious poet. Much love! Forever,
Your good friend,
Fleur de bonheur *Stephy* |
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Re: Loves Midnight
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 07:51:00 PM AEST
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Loved this very much...Great spontaneous write.....
Jenni |
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