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~* Away From You *~
Contributed by
Delusions
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Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 06:20:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
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I sit there in silence,
Waiting for the end,
Waiting for the shrill sound of olife to cut deep within me,
Into my soul,
Exposing a part of me i never knew existed.
The tranquill surroundings i onced longed for are gone,
And the only sounds i hear are that of the voices within me,
Driving me insine,
As i twist and turn in a laberynth of sectrets, lies and deception,
A place where i dont belong.
My soul is shattering,
And you only laugh at my pain,
You point, like im a freak,
And you watch as I degrade into a world of non existance.
A world I long to be,
Where I am away from you.....
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Delusions
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2002-11-21 18:20:00]
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Re: ~* Away From You *~
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 07:35:06 PM AEST
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You have described the hurt so well here... a very deep poem..
(It could do with a spell-check, tho'.)
Jenni |
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Re: ~* Away From You *~
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by OreO on
Thursday, 21st November 2002 @ 08:02:00 PM AEST
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Lack of communication is what
i see here, I'm sorry but it's written
all over this poem, Lack of communication
will destroy a relationship fast. Thanks for
sharing this one i really enjoyed it
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::. |
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Re: ~* Away From You *~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 14th February 2003 @ 01:57:54 AM AEST
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| been there...done that...but you have a great version of the hurt that goes with it ...good writing! |
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Re: ~* Away From You *~
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 17th March 2003 @ 03:34:36 AM AEST
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I don't really understand the comment about lack of communication.
Sometimes these feelings just come from being in the wrong relationship. I've written many a poem about feeling just this way - almost total destruction just from being in love - and we can never choose "the one" it just happens to us when we least expect it, and then we have to cope somehow when it doesn't work out. I truly relate to this poem in a big way - excellent write... Jan |
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Re: ~* Away From You *~
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by unforgiven on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 03:58:49 AM AEST
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| thank you for putting into words the emotions i could not express. everytime i read this poem i start to cry, a great testament to the amount of emotion and feelings conveyed in this poem...thank you...mwa |
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