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Reality hits the dullblade
Contributed by
sorryiforgot2smile
on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 08:52:52 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Suffer, in all it's glory.
Another Song Same old story
Last Requests?
I'll take them now, in time the voices will drown your's out.
Reality hits the dull blade
Black and blue like novacain
The Feeling of not Feeling
Makes this healing not pain
I wain
I wait for my temperature to rise
Cover these scars Cover your eyes
Cast Shadows upon me
Make Light of these lies
That you've told me a 1,000 times.
And Love, Love, Love,
Brings me back, Crawling
ANd it breaks, breaks
hear the tears falling?
And ready or not?
My fight goes unnoticed
So Cast Shadows upon me
and make me feel atrocious.
Smaller than I am,
You're larger than life
and your hands seem tightening
while holding that knife,
cutting me down to a reasonable size
I'm alive as long as breathing will suffice.
But Love, Love
Brings me back crawling
And it breaks, breaks
Do you hear the tears falling?.....I fear the near mauling, I steer for shear stalling, But when you look at me darling, I can feel myself falling apart.
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Re: Reality hits the dullblade
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 09:36:40 AM AEST
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You've got some good stuff in here, but
you need to spend some time on your spelling and punctuation.
Possessives of it and your are simply its and yours. No apostrophes needed.
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Re: Reality hits the dullblade
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by tigger on
Thursday, 18th November 2004 @ 10:45:50 AM AEST
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| it's strong meaningful i like it but work on spelling and punctuation but i get the point keep writing |
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