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nice try
Contributed by
amatt
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Saturday, 20th November 2004 @ 10:36:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
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you looked at me like i cared
you talked to me like i would listen
you hugged me like i felt it
you kissed me like i wanted it
you lied to me like i believed it
i looked and didnt caree
i didnt talk back
i pushed away from your hug
i didnt kiss back
i didnt believe your lies
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amatt
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2004-11-20 22:36:58]
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Re: nice try
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 20th November 2004 @ 10:52:30 PM AEST
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| in such a short space, i think you should use more words, but that is just my opinion. i think you had a great concept that was portrayed excellently though. |
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Re: nice try
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by alyssakoren_03 on
Saturday, 20th November 2004 @ 11:28:27 PM AEST
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hey sweetheart,
oooo that was very good!! for how short it was but sometimes very few words mean more then thousands could!! lots of peace love and sirenity
love always,
alyssa |
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Re: nice try
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by PhantomVampyress on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 12:03:59 AM AEST
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wow short and to the point.. great write. so full of emotion.. when people lie that really hurts
Peace and hope
JENNI |
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