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as i laid there
Contributed by
goofyone
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Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 04:41:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
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As I laid there
I saw the shadow near.
My breathing became heavier.
The dragon slowing crawling my way
.
My panting he had to hear.
My eyes filled with fear and tears
Could I scream and make it
all go away?
What was he going to do to me?
Dragons like a damned demon from hell
All I did was pray for him to go away.
He knelt on his knees
What was going to happen?
His eyes like hells pit of fury.
He brings more pain today
Goofyone
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Re: as i laid there
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 05:45:22 PM AEST
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Well if it's like a basilisk, you could use a mirror.
Seriously though, I think you've got a good start although I'd like to see the story continued.
Cheers! |
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Re: as i laid there
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by shattered_heart on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 07:16:15 PM AEST
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| Kind of confusing to me, but I'm sure it's just so deep that only you can understand what you were trying to say. Good write. |
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