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black on black (though turning grey)
Contributed by
Cancer
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Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 10:52:27 PM in AEST
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black on black
a shadow among shadows
and even in that darkness
blending
still feel so alone
(and the days have grown so very long
though time still passes quickly
and i can't help wondering
what i'm accomplishing with all of this)
smoke and mirrors
forgotten my circus
in favor of the sideshows
the smoke gets thicker
the mirrors bow and break
and the tent is just ash now
...blowing away
unnoticed
(is it true? can this be?
sinking in the mediocrity?
not flailing
not crying for help
just inhaling that liquid apathy
and thinking simple little thoughts)
black on black
though turning grey
a tombstone to mark
the life i've given up on ending
won't even live until i die
just breathe until i stop...
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Cancer
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2004-11-21 22:52:27]
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Re: black on black (though turning grey)
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by Jishes_4_ever on
Sunday, 21st November 2004 @ 11:16:33 PM AEST
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great write... really liked this poem a lot...
~!*!~hugs~!*!~
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Re: black on black (though turning grey)
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 01:13:13 AM AEST
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I never thought I would say this after reading
one of your poems, but I can relate to this.
The ache and pain in this poem was so real
and palpable (I think that's the right word).
This was awesome especially the part about
"inhaling that liquid apathy".
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Re: black on black (though turning grey)
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by blowfish_jane on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 06:51:50 AM AEST
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Wow this poem has so much pain to it, it so sad that alot of people go thru this. Great write its so real and honest.
Hugs,
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Re: black on black (though turning grey)
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by Stitch on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 07:59:48 AM AEST
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Overwhelming with despair. Who hasn't been there?
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Re: black on black (though turning grey)
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by sicknivesevered on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 07:59:20 PM AEST
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"forgotten my circus
in favor of the sideshows"
"and i can't help wondering
what i'm accomplishing with all of this"
Those two lines together bridge it all together for me. Great write, man. |
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