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My Reverie (Prelude)
Contributed by
matt73
on
Monday, 22nd November 2004 @ 03:28:31 PM in AEST
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Thoughts of mine, insist to speak
No I say, you'll embarrass me
abandoned intentions scream to act
No I say, stay and wait
she'll come around again
I promise you that
Regretful choices, burn my pride
stop, I say, I cant decide
Time doesn't wait, neither does fate
Stop procrastinating
have some faith
Standing confident, like a man
breaking the silence
taking a chance....
Thoughts escape, intentions let go
She listens, she smiles
she replies, "lets go"
take my hand,as I covers your eyes
"i've got something to show you, quite a surprise"
we stop, I wait, she uncovers my eyes
she stands in front of me
and glances behind
Hold on just a second, please don't peak
its almost here, for you to see
I hear a sound, I feel her shake
she turns and runs, runs away....
Something hits me, throws me to the side
I look and see, oh yes, a surprise
a figure stands, above my head
shakes my body and says..
Wake up, wake up, you didn't take your medicine
you have no choice, in this institution
We have strict rules here my friend
don't obey, you'll face the consequence
...I dreamt of her again tonight
She ran, ran away
I was hit, and thrown to the side
left with thoughts astray....
So I'll take, the medicine which they give
A little more than prescribed
fall asleep, and wait again
for my reverie to come by.
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Re: My Reverie (Prelude)
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by freckle on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 05:55:27 PM AEST
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| I like it. Especially the element of surprise when it changes direction....good write! |
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Re: My Reverie (Prelude)
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by fielding88 on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 10:25:50 AM AEST
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| I absolutely love twists at the end of..well anything. It really throws u off and surprises. This was a sweet poem, and since I read the other poem that kinda goes with this, it was even better. Great read, keep it up. |
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Re: My Reverie (Prelude)
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 04:27:12 AM AEST
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I very much enjoyed this piece.
It was well organised and sequenced, with tasteful flow and content.
Your wording is modest yet complete with flair.
I am enticed, entirely.
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