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My First and My First Love
Contributed by
Doriens_Picture
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Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 04:57:43 PM in AEST
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You were my first and my first love
I still remember and cherish that day
When you said I was your angel and
That you had been saved
It was after school at your house
It was around five in the afternoon
And you had been cutting your self all day
I remember it was hard to count all he cuts you made
I went to your house opened the door with the key you gave me
Then went to your room and the door was locked
I went to your mothers room and went out the window
I got on the ledge and walked carefully to yours
I opened and pushed away the curtains
And there you were passed out on your bed still bleeding from the wrist
I got a wet towel and some alcohol cleaned you up and made sure you were ok
I pushed the hair from you face back and saw that you had cried yourself to sleep
You still had the makeup down around your eyes
I took your shoes off and laid you on your bed in my arms
You always said you felt safest there
I knew you loved me but you could never say
I knew because I was the same way
But I always cared about you and still do till this day
You woke up hours later and saw that your cuts were cleaned and arms were wrapped
I was asleep and then you kissed me
It was the princess waking the prince with a kiss
I awoke and we started kiss sweetly as if desperate for affection
You then got up off the bed and took my hand leading me to your bath
I took your cloths off and then you took off mine
I started the water and mixing cold with hot to get that perfect temperature
Then we went in and with a wet bath towel I washed the makeup from your face
And the die from your hair because I always loved the real you
The one that you use to show only me
But stopped for reasons I never knew why
I guess you felt that you could never tell me how you really felt
And did not want me to feel the same for you
But we still went through everything with each other
You had so much stuff on that the water ran down black from your body
I got shampoo in my hands and washed your hair
And then you washed mine
After the bath I dried you and then you dried me
I carried your wrapped in a large towel to your bed
And well I guess you know the rest from there
I will always love and cherish that day
With no one else I have ever felt the same
Felt more than lips and tongue when we kissed
And more than flesh when you know the rest
I will always care about you
Even if you are not here right now
I do not know where you are
But I still do think about you
And know that I am ok
I hope you are the same
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Re: My First and My First Love
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by shattered_heart on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 05:05:07 PM AEST
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Awww...its so sad and bueatiful at the same time. It must have been a really intamate moment when you guys were in the shower together. I love it. Good write.
- Rachelle |
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Re: My First and My First Love
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 05:20:45 PM AEST
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*sob* that brings back a few memories...of a past relationship that i had .... but i thought it was a great!!!!! :)
good write !!
*Leeya* |
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Re: My First and My First Love
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 05:44:07 PM AEST
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Very sad yet beautifull-n-tender.
Hang tuff my friend.
Maybe soon u'll hear from them.
luv, huggs, faith, hope,
emy |
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Re: My First and My First Love
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 06:52:10 PM AEST
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| excellent write. well written....you know how i "love" these writes so much.... |
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Re: My First and My First Love
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by Dri on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 07:57:28 PM AEST
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as every girl out there goes 'awwwww!!'
very beautiful, heartfelt, all together a good write. |
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Re: My First and My First Love
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by addicted2selfharm on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 11:51:13 PM AEST
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| Aww, very pretty, too bad no one has ever done that for me...even thought that has happened more than once....very pretty...great job John. =) |
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Re: My First and My First Love
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by pixie on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 07:38:48 AM AEST
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*sighs* awwwww John this is lovely, made me smile ,
pixie xx |
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Re: My First and My First Love
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by eatfresh22 on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 12:37:47 AM AEST
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Lovely story of a first love. You kept me captivated until the end. Good work.
~Carrie~ |
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