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your over
Contributed by
amatt
on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 10:04:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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your hate
what you think i care if you have it against me
your lies
you tell me and you think i believe them
your love
is no longer showed anymore
your time
is done cuz im coming for you
your fate
has been decided when you stabbed me in the back
your end
is here
Copyright ©
amatt
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2004-11-24 22:04:19]
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Re: your over
(User Rating: 1 )
by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 12:23:42 AM AEST
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wow this is powerful and very painful write.. this is an awesome write.. great job
Peace and hope
JENNI |
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Re: your over
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by Sir_Odd87 on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 10:56:25 AM AEST
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| I don't want to come off as not liking it or anything, because I do... It's very good... just a few little grammar things I noticed. In line six, "showed" should be "shown", and in line ten, "has" should be "had"... Nothing major, you understand. I still very much liked this poem. It was, is, and will continue to be, a very good write. |
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