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Lost peices of shattered dreams
Contributed by
Gothchyk
on
Wednesday, 24th November 2004 @ 10:59:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Hands are cold, feel like ice
They need the touch of someone warm
Someone she can trust
She hides herself in lies
Unable to rid herself of this wall
She's scared and helpless
Unable to move
Frozen like the world She's surrounded by
Her past is a jumble of secrets no one knows
It is a past she won't let anyone know about
People push her while counting on fingers and toes
With bows in their hair and around their necks
Telling her what to do saying it will help
but they go without succeeding
No one understands her
There is nowhere she can go that feels safe
She cannot trust
Her tears fall like drops of rain
As Consequence acompanys every choice she makes
But all are necessary despite the grief
She is living a life with a past that she thinks is unacceptable
A past she wishes no one would have to live with
A past she hoped would disappear
She surrounds herself in a bubble that no one can pass through
But if the wind were strong enough
To lift the bubble and all that is inside
And set it free...
But that is meerly a dream that has been shattered
And she realized early on
That shattered dreams are nearly impossible to put back together
For pieces quickly get lost as they surrender to the gravity that pulls them down
The Hiding places are unknown to every seeing eye
They will remain unknown
Until someone she can trust is finally revealed
She puts her hopes on hold
Though they change as she grows older
Maybe they will mold themselves
Into something that allows her fears to leave
While she ponders this new thought
She allows herself fall into a slumber in which no one can undo
And her dreams finally come true
Copyright ©
Gothchyk
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2004-11-24 22:59:57]
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Re: Lost peices of shattered dreams
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 25th November 2004 @ 04:44:16 PM AEST
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I'm surprised that I am t he first person to
comment on this. For starters I enjoyed this
poem/story even though it was rather sad. I
liked the descripetiveness (yes that's a word!)
of this poem. It was quite good keep on
posting.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Lost peices of shattered dreams
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by EternalNight4x on
Friday, 26th November 2004 @ 12:14:54 PM AEST
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| very well written and well expressed write, this is yet another poem I can very mcuh relate to...I liked the words you choose to covney how she feels...overlal very well written keep on posting |
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Re: Lost peices of shattered dreams
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 06:35:06 AM AEST
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"She cannot trust
Her tears fall like drops of rain"
&
"Frozen like the world She's surrounded by
Her past is a jumble of secrets no one knows"
This is either inspired judgement, or inspired errors. I love the way this reads, even if it is unintentional . . .
Very enjoyable, GC. |
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Re: Lost peices of shattered dreams
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by Doriens_Picture on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 11:17:20 PM AEST
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I love your poems you are a great addition to the site
cant wait to read more of them |
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Re: Lost peices of shattered dreams
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 21st December 2004 @ 10:33:38 PM AEST
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| DAMN! I have got to read more of your work. |
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