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The Vodka
Contributed by
Joker17
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Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 04:20:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The Vodka - by J. Samuelson 01/21/2001
With shortness of breath I lie gasping
Its hit me, all that Ill be missing
She just left me, so very abruptly
And crushed me, and all of my wishing.
Last night, the letter said goodbye
Didnt sink in, till I woke today
Aroused drunken sleep in my eyes
I broke down, then drank it away.
The bottle, like I, hit the floor
We shattered together once more
I got back up, then fell right back down
The tears, and The Vodka still pour.
I cant find my way out of this
Everything, is drowning in me
Alcohol is sure not the answer
But nothing else offers relief.
Keep drowning, and drinking away
Keep telling myself Ill get through
A couple more hours to midnight
I might just survive to day two.
The nightfall brings such a silence
The liquor is all that will hold me
Its the only thing I belong to
It promised to never leave me.
I kept thinking you wanted to try
You told me but it was a lie
You waited two months to tell me
Then out of the blue, said goodbye.
Must have been an easy decision
You made in the blink of an eye
You caught me off-guard, unaware
Again, Im starting to cry.
You promised yourself if love found you
Youd never make that same mistake
Of letting it slip away from you
A promise to you, you did break.
So what was all the I miss yous?
What were the feelings you showed?
Just lies, and games of deception?
Was I just some stop on your road?
This coffee I switched to is bitter
It explodes, as it smashes the wall
The Vodka will be my best friend now
Well drown together, and fall.
Its been here with me since last night
Its the only thing that I can keep
The Vodka, has kept its blurred promise
Its with me, to put me to sleep.
Copyright ©
Joker17
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2002-11-23 16:20:00]
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Re: The Vodka
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by TheBirdMan on
Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 05:34:02 PM AEST
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| So true. I think alot of people can relate to this, sometimes when you feel abandoned you turn to something or someone, and in this unfortunate case, its alcohol. Great write. |
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Re: The Vodka
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by Joker17 on
Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 08:30:36 PM AEST
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To: TheBirdMan,
Thank you very much for the positive feedback. It is appreciated more than you know. |
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Re: The Vodka
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by DreamWeaver on
Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 09:02:03 PM AEST
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Have felt this exact same way ... I feel that the alcohol is the lesser of all the other evils you could turn to .... and it blots out a little bit for a while ... but unfortunately not for long.
Great write ... enjoyed this one very much. |
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Re: The Vodka
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by Joker17 on
Saturday, 23rd November 2002 @ 09:21:45 PM AEST
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| Well, we all seemed to have been here at one time or another, and as sad as it is, it does help temporarily. Just thank God, there are better days to follow, and it can only get better with time. |
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Re: The Vodka
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by Suzy on
Sunday, 24th November 2002 @ 03:02:15 PM AEST
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You said it yourself things can only get better with time..unfortunately so many of us have been in this place...this is an awesome write...thanks for sharing such a heart wrenching experience...
Lasca |
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Re: The Vodka
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by WiL_CA on
Monday, 25th November 2002 @ 02:22:14 AM AEST
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| good write |
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Re: The Vodka
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by DreamsOfDark on
Wednesday, 18th December 2002 @ 11:48:07 PM AEST
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| Its is a great write, and no to sound repetive but wow. The way it hits truth and rings a bell I think anyone can relate to it in some way or another. Because everyone knows loss and need and wanting or longing for a proise not to be broken... |
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Re: The Vodka
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by TundraHydra on
Wednesday, 22nd January 2003 @ 09:10:14 PM AEST
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| If this poem doesnt hit the mark I dont know what will. All the pain I've been thru that hurts like this I hope I dont become like this. |
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Re: The Vodka
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th June 2004 @ 05:11:20 AM AEST
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Such an excellent poem. I feel more people should read it.
"The bottle, like I, hit the floor
We shattered together once more"
Great lines, Joker. |
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Re: The Vodka
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by AmyLee4Ever on
Sunday, 3rd July 2005 @ 07:05:09 PM AEST
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Omg this is a fascinating poem. There is talent here... and real pain. I am sorry that you had to go through this. I hope you can get out of your slump. I am sure it will get better...
Jodi |
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