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What is this?
Contributed by
vampyrekiss
on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 07:13:16 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Why am I wanting this?
I have everything now
Why do I
want to feel
the cold steel
pressed aginst
my warm skin?
To rip open my skin
To watch as the blood
drains out of me
Wishing everything
would fade away
To not have to worry about
what happens tomorow
Just watching
my blood drain away
To cut though
so deep
But I wont let out
one peep
A smile will cross my face
As I fall to the coll floor
The darkness
has won
Copyright ©
vampyrekiss
... [
2004-11-27 19:13:16]
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Re: What is this?
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by reprobate on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 08:45:39 PM AEST
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how about 'the sickness'
at least that's my feeling...since my son started cutting himself and he can't explain it to me
so i see it any cutting as 'the sickness'
thanks for sharing |
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Re: What is this?
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by Jodwin on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 09:43:44 PM AEST
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I like this one, except the line "The darkness has won". It takes away the concentration from the character's pain to something completely different.
However, that line is good to have for people who might get sick from this poem. :) |
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