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Fornicated Mind
Contributed by
jaeann
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Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 11:14:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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She's run all out of paper
the lines have grown to fade
a flicker left over from the taper
it's now time to raise the shade.
She's gets the final word
right along with the picture
he never really heard
nor chose to see the stricture.
It bends her broken mind
to think of their careless ways
everything they leave behind
while keeping her on display.
She scoffs and scorns her cries
desolate in her grief
always the one who tries
as they run out like a thief.
Her dance is far from over
a journey set to repeat
when rolling in the clover
fate does ruefully cheat.
She understands it all too clear now
it ripped away her net
she surrenders but does not bow
nor dons that collar yet.
She's borne the searing pain
and half the price of shame
she's suffered hard like cain
her mind was the last to maim.
Patience was her virtue
beauty this wretched curse
destiny is way over due
for she's already ridden the hearse.
She's tired and bone weary
of only getting a taste
so now she's forever leery
but far from being chaste.
She offered what no one had ever touched
a core within herself
now she's standing stunned and so crushed
left dangling from the shelf.
She releases with her absolution
the noble sir with all the charm
saddened by the dissolution
and all the remaining harm.
He touched her soul yet burned the core
woke the siren and hid the girl
kindred spirits from long ago lore
may the wielded whip so unfurl.
So she lays broken and crawling
lost out in the rain
at her mind the demons are mauling
they laugh 'cause she missed the train.
Copyright ©
jaeann
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2004-11-27 23:14:27]
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Re: Fornicated Mind
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 27th November 2004 @ 11:34:46 PM AEST
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| powerful write. well written. |
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Re: Fornicated Mind
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 01:20:33 AM AEST
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Read this three times and finally got it the
third time. This was a very vivid poem written
with such a sense of heartache. The images
will remain seared in my head for a while.
The last line I thought was a bit weak, but the
rest of the poem was rad.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Fornicated Mind
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by EternalNight4x on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 09:40:49 AM AEST
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| well described and a powerful write...you're choice of words were excellent, great job keep on posting |
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Re: Fornicated Mind
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by pixie on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 10:18:57 AM AEST
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written very well, a masterpiece
pixie xx |
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Re: Fornicated Mind
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by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 05:44:56 PM AEST
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There is always such power in your writes...such turmoil of the soul.
Very well done once again my friend
Roses
Larry
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Re: Fornicated Mind
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 11:36:49 AM AEST
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| A truly beautiful piece of poetry..... Magnificent write!!!! |
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Re: Fornicated Mind
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by waos on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 08:11:02 PM AEST
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| wow yeah, very beautiful and eloquently put. beautiful in a certain sense i suppose. the last line i suppose could be made to suit the rest of the language of the poem, but yeah. i believe i could read this many times and still find out new things |
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