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triangle love
Contributed by
bebe20071
on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 06:53:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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a boy loved a girl
he wanted to tell her his feeling
so he gave her a parl
and took her dancing
he asked her out
and she said sure
with no dout
her hear wasn't pour
after three days
she dump him
he asked her if there are ways
she said no and left him
he told his friend
about his broken heart
and how it ended
and why he's toren apart
the friend tried to help him
to forget about her
she tried to show him
he is better without her
the boy couldn't forget
he still loved her
with no regret
about her
he deiced to go back
the friend tried to stop him
but he still went back
the friend felt sad for him
the friend though about him
and she realized
that she loved him
she shook her head and cried
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Re: triangle love
(User Rating: 1 )
by Rxqueen on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 05:35:55 AM AEST
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| OK, there were a lot of spelling and grammer mistakes. It is a sad write, and I think if you clean it up a bit it will be better. Try re writing it with out the mistakes, it will read a lot smoother... |
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