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Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 11:39:35 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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it's the little things,
sweet and sour
as the sauce
you lick off your fingers
-while laughing-
in one more
cheap chinese restaurant
[you say,
everything will be okay nora]
and it's
silent borrowed scars, dear;
how you never let yourself
flinch away
-the reasons you want to-
and wonton soup you'll not touch,
because
dear god it burns it burns
the ghost of a touch
you still feel
[you say,
its ok really, im sorta happy now]
thin paper hidden
in shatter-sweets;
and the italic red ink
--whispering factory-made
promises of tomorrow--
agrees with you
(my fingers tremble
too much to open it
and
I don't believe in fortune cookies anymore.)
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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2004-11-28 23:39:35]
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by Doriens_Picture on
Sunday, 28th November 2004 @ 11:51:53 PM AEST
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yeah i dont either mine said you will have your period soon and i am a guy so i was like huh
also i hate the lucky loto numbers they never work |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 12:08:29 AM AEST
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beautiful poem Nora I liked all the references
to Chinese food and the like. I'm sure this
was filled with hidden meaning that I am not
smart enough to get, but I enjoyed it
regardless. I liked the part with the wonton
soup the best.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by iodinelove on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 12:17:40 AM AEST
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I like fried rice! I do I do......but my fortunes are always blank.....guess i'm screwed^_^
I liked the poem....it reminds of this girl i knew once.....not that she liked asian cooking....but the style of writing....anyway..it was good.. |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by anonymous_skies on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 03:12:56 AM AEST
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Though I cant' say I know much about Chinese food, Wonton soup does NOT burn *looks clueless 'n stuff*
Wonton soup is tasty.
Your poem makes me want to scream it's not fair, too... I was practically sitting next to you as I read the poem, eyeing your food hungrily and wishing I could have a bite, then screaming right alongside you....
Bleh... |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by lostinmyself on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 08:53:58 AM AEST
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Oh hun...this made me feel so sad.
Especially in certain places, where I can see other messages written beneath the words...
Am I right?
And No...It's not fair.
I love the end of this, Hun. It's just right, and I can feel it.
Love ya hun.
*hugs*
Phil xxx
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by arden on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 09:13:27 AM AEST
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*Wipes tear*
No words Nora... no words...
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 11:12:48 AM AEST
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i don't get it as usual, but fortune cookies rock. i got 2 the other night. not as impressive as the 4 from last time. hehe.
but yeah. i don't get it. at all. meh. i'm sure it's great. |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by neveryours on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 01:46:08 PM AEST
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You did well here - you capture melancholy vividly. Smart snappy ending, all in all a good write, and evocative read.
Thanks for writing. |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by eyesxcriedxout1989 on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 02:07:23 PM AEST
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I thought this was excellent...when I read the description I thought it was gonna be something like "Yay!! Ice cream, and chinese people, YAY!!!" but it was a vey deep, evocative read...Wonderful
Mason |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by Willofree on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 05:04:00 PM AEST
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I love your style, as it really intregues me. I admit, however, I have a hard time understanding all of it.... some I can figure out.
Impressive write
Willofree |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by emystar on
Monday, 6th December 2004 @ 03:22:13 AM AEST
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Very interesting write.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by Eve on
Tuesday, 7th December 2004 @ 04:42:26 PM AEST
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Oh man. I almost started thinking about Chinese food, too... but then those cryptic underlying words hit. Last stanza gets me.
Keep writing,
-Eve. |
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Re: Imperial Garden Oriental Cuisine
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 8th December 2004 @ 07:26:20 AM AEST
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You have such a way with words - I can only admire and sigh.
Thanks for writing. |
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