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MY INVISIBLE FRIEND
Contributed by
sandy_poetrygodslove
on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 12:16:10 PM in AEST
Topic:
happypoetry
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I thought maybe,
I could tell you my problem
My problem is really big,
I hope you can help me,
I hope you will understand,
See I have a friend,
No one can see,
I can feel his presence,
And love He has for me,
He can do anything,
He made the whole wide world,
And only if you look for him,
You will hear his word.
COME TO ME CHILDREN,
LEAN ON ME TODAY,
LET ME HOLD YOUR HAND,
LET ME GUIDE YOUR WAY,
ONLY IF YOU LET ME
ASK ME TODAY,
I'LL BE THERE FOR YOU,
JUST LET ME KNOW
WHEN YOU PRAY.
Can't you hear him,
Can't you understand,
What this man Jesus did,
For you way back then.
He is almighty
And all things are possible to,
So take it to Jesus,
And He will make you new.
Well I feel better,
Just telling you about him,
I hope you share my problem,
Because I'm a fool for him.
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Re: MY INVISIBLE FRIEND
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th November 2004 @ 01:39:46 PM AEST
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well done and well said Sandy.
I could use a bit of Him right now... |
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Re: MY INVISIBLE FRIEND
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by ladyaryssa on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 03:19:23 PM AEST
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As per your request, I read!
I like it a lot better than the other one I commented on, which wasn't half bad either... I don't think that stanza should be in capitals though. If you want to make it different because it's a quote/different voice, you'd be better italicizing it. Capitilizing it automatically makes it seem shouted. That is all in the way of negativeness, other than that it is simple, honest and the stuff good poetry is made of. |
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