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Confusions
Contributed by
In2thetwilightzone
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Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 01:17:27 PM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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burning from the inside,
a thrashing cane across my back,
a slitting freeze down my spine,
my mind is under attack,
im under siege,
i am the one he tames,,
i try cutting out the singes,
but my heart is still in flames,
reluctant tears glide down my cheeks,
and as i whine i realise,
i am the victim,
the sufferer,
i am the one caught in a cobweb of lies
i must escape and i must pull through,
ill do what ever it takes,
even if it means leaving you
just let me live,
just let me breathe,
tell me your true feelings,
dont draw the blood then watch me bleed,
ill curse and cry,
fall to my knees,
i cant save myself,
so save me please,
if pain is your intention,
ill leave this sector of my life,
ill walk right through the exit,
and look back in angered strife...
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2004-11-30 13:17:27]
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Re: Confusions
(User Rating: 1 )
by ladyaryssa on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 01:33:58 PM AEST
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| I didn't find the ending completely satisfactory, but parts of it I liked very much. Twas a bit melodramatic, but that's OK when you're writing about teenage angst; as a fellow sufferer I'm quite fond of melodrama. Keep writing! |
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