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Lost a Part of Me
Contributed by
essentially9
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Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 08:30:13 PM in AEST
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Lost a Part of Me
I tried to not believe you
When you said you'd always be here
But I did despite trying not to
And now confirmed is my fear
You never even cared to fulfill this
Promise, even though you sealed it
I'm left to regret
That I ever met
Someone who just walked away
When I needed them there
You never cared to stay
With the responsibility to bear
You were my father
And you just walked out the door
And left my mother and your daughter
Without a care forever more
I used to think you'd come back
But you never did to this world shrouded in black
I feared to believe you
Even through I wanted to
I lost a part of me
And I've never been the same
I wish for you to come back and be
A father and take away this pain
You missed me growing up to be
Someone to be proud of
Because you chose to leave
And now I doubt anyone's love
These tears staining the page
Shows I miss you still, the feelings didn't fade
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by Doriens_Picture on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 08:34:36 PM AEST
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| this is heart wrentching |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by autumngreeneyes on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 11:25:19 PM AEST
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| good job |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by Doriens_Picture on
Tuesday, 30th November 2004 @ 11:36:52 PM AEST
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| i am also sorry that you cried |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 01:44:52 AM AEST
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great work you did well to get it all down on paper, your father leaving obviously had a traumatic effect on you now you've shared your pain with others. There's an old proverb a problem shared is a problem halved.
All the best.
Johnny. |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by pixie on
Wednesday, 1st December 2004 @ 05:28:59 AM AEST
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awwww this is one of the saddest poems I have read to date., you threw your heart and soul into this I can tell, *hugs*
pixie xx |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by theMoth on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 06:17:54 PM AEST
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My heart goes ou to you.
--Mothy |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by Willofree on
Thursday, 2nd December 2004 @ 10:27:15 PM AEST
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Very sad and heartfelt. You did a beautiful job with a very difficult issue. I hope sharing helps ease the pain.
God Bless
Willofree |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by nikkkkki on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 09:49:40 PM AEST
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| this is a great write. i understood it cuz im in the same situation. you said it as it is. |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by emystar on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 12:06:44 AM AEST
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this so sad but beautifull.
It's a masterpeice.
I raised my three children with no help from their father. I know it's hard. He lives in the same town now and is in bad health but at least his kids know where to find him now.
Don't ever give up hope.
luv, huggs, faith, hope, joy, peace,
emy |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by afterdark on
Monday, 6th December 2004 @ 06:00:04 PM AEST
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| Damnitt this is a good write...I really felt this.. |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 9th December 2004 @ 10:12:48 PM AEST
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This is so sad.... I hope things are better now..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Lost a Part of Me
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by ForeverAlone on
Sunday, 26th February 2006 @ 10:09:02 PM AEST
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Terrible me missed this one lil sis, a write that i can say stands the test of time. never the less dear Jen, you make me find truth in your words. Most poems these days i never finish, i never get the the end of them aroud here. I've always been able to do so with yours though, no matter if it was your longest poem ever, or an off night, Your writes exceed with pure heartfelt emotion. I've said this many times, here is it again; Be you Jen. Even if the note made was and additive then doesnt make it lesser of now.
~Big Bro |
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