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Dissected By Love
Contributed by
Overstated
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Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 12:17:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The night air molests my skin
My breath enhanced by all thats within
You know Im not running anymore
My eyes are blue again, the darkness floored
Maybe you were just a phase
Maybe I shouldnt have believed you
When you said Ill never change
Now the black light pulls like a curtain
My head is like Sarajevo
My thoughts even less certain
It all makes me suffer vertigo
Ive missed the not knowing whats to come
Sterile life had become dissected by love
I wish I had some power in this charade
But my only strength is to know never to let us fade
Maybe this is a nice ending to the story
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Overstated
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Re: Dissected By Love
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by MMISS on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 12:59:00 PM AEST
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| nice and to the point. great work as always |
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Re: Dissected By Love
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by arden on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 01:03:52 PM AEST
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deep and meaningful.
well written. it was an interesting write. made me think. nicely done.
enjoyed it.
Arden |
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Re: Dissected By Love
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by in2thetwilightzone2 on
Friday, 3rd December 2004 @ 01:15:25 PM AEST
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| oh darkness beneath the moon. brilliant |
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Re: Dissected By Love
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by Renstar on
Sunday, 5th December 2004 @ 04:42:56 PM AEST
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| great write i really liked this good work:) |
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Re: Dissected By Love
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by PumpkinPie on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 09:23:25 PM AEST
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Keep strong,I have faith in you,you'll get through this,beautifully done
PumpkinPie |
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Re: Dissected By Love
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by NightOwl on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 04:57:39 PM AEST
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I loved the rhyme scheme and the comparisons...
Now the black light pulls like a curtain
My head is like Sarajevo
My thoughts even less certain
It all makes me suffer vertigo
Absolutely brilliant!!
*~Erin~* |
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