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her world
Contributed by
eternityandaday4u
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Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 10:09:16 PM in AEST
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her world becomes hazy
she's out of control
she's no longer happy
she's a darkened battered soul!
her world is torn
stuck back in the past
her family all hater her
her life fades too fast!
whats left is the memory
the memories of pain
bruises no longer visible
the things they did in vain!
her friends no longer like her
her faith takes back seat
her life is shattered
she feels shes been beat
her life comes to a hault
the wars been lost
the battle she fought
was a heartaching cost!
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2004-12-04 22:09:16]
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Re: her world
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by Kindredblood_dragon on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 10:16:57 PM AEST
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| Awesome write, so visual and full of felt emotion, a clear picture painted of torment and pain, well composed and written. |
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Re: her world
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by Chanti on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 10:31:02 PM AEST
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great write... full of tragedy...
-Chanti |
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Re: her world
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by sicknivesevered on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 10:38:32 PM AEST
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| Yes, "full of tragedy" indeed. And the "!" at the end of the stanzas gave it a groovy crescendo! ^^ Good write. |
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Re: her world
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by Jenn2004 on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 10:47:36 PM AEST
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| Great Write!!! |
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Re: her world
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 4th December 2004 @ 10:51:42 PM AEST
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| fantastic write. a good read. |
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