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Gone
Contributed by
Loopylou
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Monday, 6th December 2004 @ 04:44:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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I dont know quite where it went
but it flew
and it left a trail of tourment behind it
the wind was feirce that night
and the cold made me shiver
my body was numb
but as i walked i heard the rattling
of my broken heart
and the pecies litterd the ground
like burnt paper
I said goodnight to you
but i dont think you heard me over the rain
the sun hasent returned from its holiday yet
and are faces are full of shadows
so incase you didnt hear me
goodnight sweetheart
sweet dreams of peace
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2004-12-06 04:44:37]
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Re: Gone
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by iodinelove on
Monday, 6th December 2004 @ 05:25:11 AM AEST
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| ok....do you mean torment? i think you do, but i wasn't sure. You have potential.....remember, poetry is like acting....hell, all writing is like acting.....you take real emotions and you blow them out of proportion. To do that, you have to find the right words ^_^ keep writing! |
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