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free
Contributed by
wakegurl77
on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 07:35:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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floating out on the sea
Dive in water to let me free
no one around to "rescue" me
no one around to "freak" on me
Dive into the water
and let it all go
freeing my mind
freeing my soul
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2004-12-10 19:35:42]
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Re: free
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by hoist1atca on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 08:42:08 PM AEST
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Sounds Good-
Water has a relaxing way about it-
It will wash away your troubles-
Joe |
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Re: free
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 10th December 2004 @ 09:08:23 PM AEST
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| needs to have a different word for the rhyme going with me, instead of having it twice. the one with the "no one around to freak on me" just doesnt sound right or go right with this poem. other than that i liked this. |
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