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Doubt
Contributed by
bonita2689
on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 05:46:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Somewhere between
the black and white lines
gray exists in unspeakable rhymes
Sometimes its suffocating
taunting its limits
others its fading
reeking of timidness
Shedding colors
that only scream obstacles
swimming in haze
that often seems unbearable
Voices that shadow
so profound yet so unreal
painting water colors
that somehow you can feel
Calling its prey
like a child so naive
whispering softly
to quench its evil greed
Confusing the mindless
only to unfold its depths
greeting friction merrily
wishing of your death
Copyright ©
bonita2689
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Re: Doubt
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by aceJace on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 05:56:19 PM AEST
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| Such a nice rythm to this piece. It paints and it moves. Not usually my style such word candy but enjoyable nevertheless. Kudos. |
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Re: Doubt
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by Apolla on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 06:09:33 PM AEST
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| It's a nice poem, just don't lose hold of what your tyring to say in order to rhyme. |
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Re: Doubt
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Tuesday, 14th December 2004 @ 06:58:00 PM AEST
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| wow, awesome, well done |
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Re: Doubt
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by AbnormalPunk on
Wednesday, 15th December 2004 @ 02:26:09 PM AEST
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| thanx for the comments on my stuff... im workin on gettin some published so any comments are dearly welcomed on any poem... and as of your poem.... i love it... it is simply amazing... the words fall together far so amazingly.... this HAS to be one of my favs on this site in a long while... keep em coming... |
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Re: Doubt
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by catz77 on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 10:16:03 PM AEST
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I love this.....
thanks for commenting my poem and giving me that advice.
Id gladly take any advice from you.
this poem rhymes and makes perfect sense
some people get lost in the rhymes but you keep it controlled, thats rare
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Re: Doubt
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by russ-dawg on
Thursday, 9th June 2005 @ 11:54:21 PM AEST
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| that was a great poem that is a poem i am really glad i read keep writting! |
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