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From Fear to Freedom
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 01:08:01 AM in AEST
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I've walked these long miles
And now these storm clouds are settling
I'm so tired and I dwell in silence
The silence only broken by
The steady splatter of my tears
Optimism fades away to pessimism
(Can you see the razor reflected in my eyes?)
Bloodied fingers caress my tear-stained cheeks
As I'm left wishing for yesterday
Practicing the art of self-rejection
And trying to shed this skin that I hate
Made poignant by the blood that drips from my arms,
But all it amounts too is failed attempts
(Failed attempts at what, a constant rumour)
Immobilized by the winds of depression
Just a breath, but more than I can handle
I use dust to clot my gaping wounds
And use the pain to head off my emotional wounds
Bitterness shrinks my heart to a blackened hole
Daggers in my head pushing me closer to insanity
(Although some would argue I've already reached that "goal")
Almost intoxicated by this hatred that consumes me
Crying tears of self-pity and broken pride
Groveling in the dust begging myself to forgive me
Touching my scars that keep me whole,
But revolted at the pain they bring
Go underground so I can hide from my shadow
(But I can never escape from these voices)
Kneeling in this wet soil I whisper fervent prayers
To my Lord to free me from my fear and timidity
You gather me in Your arms and whisper
"You are my son in whom I am well pleased"
Tears roll down my face... healing tears
I lay my pain and depression at your feet
My sin is taken, forgotten, I am forgiven and I am made FREE
(I should've done this at the start)
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2004-12-16 01:08:01]
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by Tanmaya on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 01:28:56 AM AEST
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There is indeed wonderful hope at the end of your poem.
Very well-expressed....no matter how deep the darkness and pain- God's love reaches deeper, deeper still.
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by blowfish_jane on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 01:46:49 AM AEST
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OMG that was brilliantly beautiful, the outcome of the entire poem really grabbed me, sad words are shown with earnest. This is really inspiring Joel. Great write 5/5
Hugs,
Jane
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 02:20:26 AM AEST
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Very powerful work indeed, excellently produced.
Johnny. |
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by pixie on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 06:05:52 AM AEST
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excellent write Joel, this was amazing,
pixie xx |
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by Sapphire_Blue on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 06:36:33 AM AEST
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So emotionally intense you have gotten ahold of your words and let all the feelings within you flow free....so much honesty your words are like a vision unfolding before my eyes....so much passion yet filled with a gentlenss amonst the agony...I am glad you have found peace within your heart....finally you are are free....beautiful write....
Peace and strength to you always
May god guide you through love.
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by Deathly_Rose on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 08:11:05 AM AEST
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very well written, very clearly explained
It does start out dark, but it flows through the emotions
I think that this poem speaks out to many people, and I thank you for writing this poem..
*~Alicia~* |
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by Jenni_K on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 11:43:38 AM AEST
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I honestly think this is your best write yet, Joel.... Welll done!!
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by autumngreeneyes on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 03:00:50 PM AEST
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| Joel, what I see is forgivness of self.. very important.. great write.. good job. |
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by sicknivesevered on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 07:48:41 PM AEST
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This is very good. Its written very well and I like it a lot.
I didn't really go for the ending, but thats just because of my personal beliefs, and hey, you didn't write this for me. XD
The line: "(Can you see the razor reflected in my eyes?)" Is amazing. Great work! (^_^)v |
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 23rd December 2004 @ 04:18:35 PM AEST
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You took me from the depths of despair right to the heights of heaven. It is at our darkest hours that we can see the light most clearly........if we take the time to look ;o)
Excellent
Barkeep!
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Re: From Fear to Freedom
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by Bleeding_Nightmares on
Tuesday, 8th February 2005 @ 12:09:25 AM AEST
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| You put everthing in adding to the flow and feel your words expressed, deep and vivid poem, beautifully written. |
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