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Know Prison
Contributed by
Living_In_My_Dream
on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 05:29:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Life is a prison,
Oh God let me out.
No one to listen,
To hear when you shout.
Climb the walls of insanity,
Ride the waves of despair.
If you fall it don't matter,
There's no one to care.
Used to wish for a window,
To see birds, trees and sky,
But you're better without one -
Stops you aiming too high.
Watching freedom is painful,
For those locked away.
Seeing joy, love and happiness,
Another price that you pay.
Strong is good, weak is bad.
Be it false, be it true.
Your mind makes the choice,
And enforces it too.
Cell walls built by society,
With rules to adhere.
If you breach the acceptable,
You had better beware.
Hide the pain, carry on,
Routine is the key.
Don't let on that you're not,
What you're pretending to be.
Lock it all up inside you,
How badly that bodes.
Look out for that one day,
When it all just explodes.
Leaving naught but a shell,
Base functionality too.
But killing all else,
That was uniquely you.
So how do you grow,
With a timebomb inside?
Or how to defuse it,
Without destroying its ride?
You can't.
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Living_In_My_Dream
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2004-12-16 17:29:30]
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Re: Know Prison
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by juliette on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 05:47:56 PM AEST
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What perfect, pitiful, poetry. I would have to copy every word to quote all the lines I liked - especially
"Or how to diffuse it,
Without destroying its ride?".
It rocks and I will read it again and again! Thanks for sharing!
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Re: Know Prison
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by wolfman on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 06:06:40 PM AEST
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powerfuly emotional poem, yes life does feel like that some times but just give it all away and yoiu will find peace, God wiil take care of you.
I liked this poem alot it tell others how hard it seems to be and expresses our options that we see. very good please post again soon.
dont despare life will get better then it is and when it does you will see whay you had to go through such times.
read you soon. God bless |
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Re: Know Prison
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by EternalNight4x on
Thursday, 16th December 2004 @ 08:40:55 PM AEST
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| excellent poem, well written and well expressed....I can relate to this veyr much...well keep up the great postings |
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Re: Know Prison
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by EverlastingDawn on
Thursday, 12th May 2005 @ 09:09:07 AM AEST
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I love your poem, it uses such beautiful imagery to show something so sad. The harsh truth of reality is displayed with such raw fevor. Your words touch deeply, explaining what so many people have gone, or are going through. Your poem is easily related to, being able to speak about such a large range range of topics in such a short amount of text. The rhyme you used just added to how good the poem is. The poem also flows, making it easier to understand and read. Overall I think it's a wonderful write. Great Poem.
~Dawn |
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