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Death
Contributed by
setting_in_the_sun
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Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 11:23:33 PM in AEST
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When nothing really matters, and everything's the same,
everytime you turn around, you think they'll bring you pain.
You hear them whisper, and suddenly your mind is full of rage,
and you clench fists, shake your head... to them you look insane.
You're walking at a fast pace, but no one knows what's wrong,
because inside you're a wreck, and they think you are so strong.
But- you're heart is beating rapidly, and tears fall from your eyes,
because you've fallen in a dark place, and cannot find the light.
Once you were his baby, and you thought everything was right,
holding you, in his arms... all your troubles out of sight.
But- now you hear the screaming, and hear the glass just shatter,
you wear the smile on your face, but become even sadder.
Lying on your bed at night... and you're scratching at your skin,
you cannot take one more night being the same person.
You take the rope, and loose at first, right around your neck,
go outside, and pull on tight... strangled yourself to death.
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Re: Death
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by bluebird on
Saturday, 18th December 2004 @ 11:57:15 PM AEST
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wow this is great.seems like it looses rhythm on the last verse but then thats how life goes whe your feeling that way.
~keep the faith~
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Re: Death
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by Doriens_Picture on
Sunday, 19th December 2004 @ 01:19:28 AM AEST
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i agree with blue but life is just that way everything is never what it is as it was in ther begging as it is in the end
i thnk it fits the poem |
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Re: Death
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by Yodo on
Sunday, 19th December 2004 @ 01:32:38 AM AEST
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Structurally, it's a great poem. One of the better ones on this site.
Content wise... ZOMGAWD! CaN't j00 Just F33L t3h ANGST!
hehe
Angsty angsty boo hoo hoo ;) But it's still a good write. Now go write a poem about butterflies and rainbows. It'll make you feel better. |
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Re: Death
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Sunday, 19th December 2004 @ 04:49:19 AM AEST
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| wow, anotha great write.......very dark and yet sad. |
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