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Fairy Tale - Ending
Contributed by
Silent-No-More
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Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 11:29:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Lullaby singer, lost before dawn
I closed my eyes and you were gone
As nighttime visions filled my sleep
A starlit sky began to weep
because you slipped away from me
You took naivety with you
Left me to learn of fears anew
With reality staring back at me
I cant ignore probability
because you broke my heart in two
Mundane ideas now fill my mind
Chasing, chasing my soul is Time
The calendar pages fall to the floor
Ive drifted now a decade or more
because you left me on my own
Responsibility is bearing down
My childhoods in the lost and found
But no longer do I have the right
To claim it mine, though wish I might
because you took it away from me
Never did you tell me what to do
With all the wishes I made to you
I still recall them, but I now doubt
Ill ever again let them slip out
because youve stolen my desire to
So no more wishing on stars today
I must find a new and different way
Letting go the fairy tale to find truth
I still miss you though, my dear Youth
because you kept the dream alive
Goodbye,
Childlike wishing
Goodbye
Copyright ©
Silent-No-More
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2004-12-24 11:29:45]
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by pixie on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 11:32:35 AM AEST
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poems are great when they flow from nowhere, this is amazing work, :)
pixie xx |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 11:32:52 AM AEST
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| Oh to be young again. Wonderful write. thanks and Merry Christmas to you and yours............Mike |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by autumngreeneyes on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 11:41:57 AM AEST
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| who's to say if it's in the lost and found..that it can't be found? I loved that line..I loved the whole write. |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by xxbreathlessx on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 02:35:04 PM AEST
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| AMAZING! it flowed beautifully! i really enojyed it and the ending was unique and great. i look foward to more writings like this from you! |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 03:01:25 PM AEST
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| SNM, this is really beautiful. It's so tough when we see youth vanishing and yet don't necessarily feel any older on the inside. "chasing my soul is Time" is great phrasing. cheers! (and hugs) J. |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 24th December 2004 @ 03:10:11 PM AEST
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Oh hunni...
This is so sad..
And the last three lines, almost broke me in two.
Just those three lines made the poem more powerful than many I've seen.
But I think that may be because I know you. And I know what you mean, and I know I relate.
This is an amazing write hunni,
*hugs you tons*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by the_Ghost_Moth on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 07:14:55 PM AEST
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Trumpalicious.
Good construction,
with an effective ending.
Good words thruout,
nice sincere emotions.
A ver good Snemmy poem.
--Ghosty |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by faith_my_eyes on
Monday, 27th December 2004 @ 11:41:43 PM AEST
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oh wow.... for coming out of nowhere, this poem is well crafted and it seems as if it would be deeply felt...My favorite stanza is "
So no more wishing on stars today
I must find a new and different way
Letting go the fairy tale to find truth
I still miss you though, my dear Youth
… because you kept the dream alive"
I can very much relate to this at the point in my life that I am.
The ending added a wistful tone and wraps up the poem well. This is a masterpiece. |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 28th December 2004 @ 08:19:10 AM AEST
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sorry, I must be in denial, I won'y give up wishing on stars!!!
SNM...this is a very lovely tribute to that which we all must eventually lose....except in out hearts. |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by UnlovedChild on
Saturday, 26th March 2005 @ 04:26:09 PM AEST
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| A very emotional, yet beautiful poem. |
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Re: Fairy Tale - Ending
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 4th June 2006 @ 01:55:28 AM AEST
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Poetry is ordinary language raised to the N th power.
- Paul Engle
And that, my dear, is what you always do
Timbo
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