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In Sanity
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Nazmythian
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Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 02:57:45 PM in AEST
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~ ~
Sweeping through the corridors
of my mind
Dusting off the pictures there
she finds
Shattered remnants of
her memory
Tossed about and left
half-hazardly
Cleaning cobwebs from the
dark recesses
White washing the walls then
she addresses
Tapestries in tatters
on the floor
Pieces left behind
from times before
Salvaging all that
which can be saved
She boxes them away
for rainy days
Wond'rin how this mess
came to be made
She turns to view her handiwork
then fades
Back into the darkness
whence she came
Tending to the ever burning
flame
~ ~
( Post Script : I felt a need to clarify after the fact
I was attempting to capture the image of a memory, cleaning up the mess my conciousness made of it, as it came and visited ... then it returns to the place where memories reside ~ untill you call them up again ... Nazmythian )
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Re: In Sanity
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by poetmarie on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 03:01:09 PM AEST
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| I like this poem. Good rhythm and flow. Good imagery, I was clearly able to visualize it. |
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Re: In Sanity
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by arden on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 03:06:38 PM AEST
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i agree with the comment above.
its a really cool poem i think.
good mental pictures and such.
lovely poem nazzy. enjoyed it.
5 stars
Becky |
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Re: In Sanity
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by The_Callif on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 03:11:26 PM AEST
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| i agree good flow and imagery |
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Re: In Sanity
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 03:51:26 PM AEST
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I see a window in the sun
A dusted room that's clean
I see there all the work she's done
You reaching for caffeine.
*grins*
Lovely imagery. Good motivation for spring cleaning days. Cheers!
J. |
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Re: In Sanity
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by Essentially9 on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 03:52:05 PM AEST
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| amazing write. well written....i now know a rhyme for memory =] |
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Re: In Sanity
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by Willofree on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 03:58:33 PM AEST
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Great way to mentally clean a closet. I really like the flow and wording of this poem. I was intrigued by the last line articularly... "Tending to the ever burning flame. I'm thinking that is your inner flame of life
Super write, Naz
Willofree
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Re: In Sanity
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 05:00:46 PM AEST
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Wow Nazzy! You are too deep, man.
This was great as is all of your poetry. How is it that you
seem so able to read into my thoughts and put them down
in verse better than I ever could? God, how I love reading
your stuff!
Take a bow.
~Breezy |
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Re: In Sanity
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by english-pea-pelter on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 05:28:06 PM AEST
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said well! two thumbs up! ^_^ V
english-pea-pleter |
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Re: In Sanity
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by autumngreeneyes on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 05:51:00 PM AEST
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| cobwebs..dusting..housework!!!! you might know a man would want a woman doing housework..ha!!! |
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Re: In Sanity
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by Kitty_cat on
Wednesday, 29th December 2004 @ 06:56:15 PM AEST
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To be honest, I didn't really understand the poem. Was there any meaning behind it or is it just the way its put on paper? I still liked it though.
cat xx |
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Re: In Sanity
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by lostinmyself on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 09:54:58 AM AEST
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Well Nazzy, I don't quite know what to make of this. lol.
And I too wonder if there is meaning behind it. I think, knowing you, that there probably is. Could be wrong, though.
Anyway, Good write, I especially like this part:
"Sweeping through the corridors
of my mind
Dusting off the pictures there
she finds
Shattered remnants of
her memory
Tossed about and left
half-hazardly"
Don't ask why I love it so much...I am unsure, maybe it just speaks to me.
Great images.
Great write hun,
*hugs tons*
Phil xxx
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Re: In Sanity
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by pixie on
Thursday, 30th December 2004 @ 10:49:43 AM AEST
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very creative, brilliant write, truly amazing,
pixie xx |
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Re: In Sanity
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by katyqueen35 on
Monday, 3rd January 2005 @ 01:41:57 AM AEST
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Dude your imagination have no limit.
Your words flows so well together.
well done.
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Re: In Sanity
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 5th January 2005 @ 07:17:15 PM AEST
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Yes, I can relate to that---especially with the postcript. Memories are so precious and at the same time so volatile. Sometimes they attack without warning. Other times they are peaceful, gentle, and serene. They can be as addictive as a drug if you lull in some of them too long. Well, you certainly do make me ramble. I think this is one of my favorites of yours.
Stitch |
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Re: In Sanity
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by FleurdeSang on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 06:50:37 PM AEST
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What an imagination you have, cheri!! INCREDIBLE! Spring cleaning time. Yes, I might have to start myself; my closet is just about to bust! Your attempt to capture that image is flawless, douce Scott! An excellent theme and meaning! LOVE IT! Another piece of perfection to add to your endless supply! Thanks so much for sharing. All my love. Forever,
Votre cheri fleur *Stephy* |
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Re: In Sanity
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by autumngreeneyes on
Thursday, 13th January 2005 @ 11:20:06 AM AEST
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| I wonder If I read this and stole my idea about the dusty floor and all that?.. it sounds too similar.. dusty memories and all that..Am I a thief..I know I borrowed for larry..now he's gone..I'm stealing from you? LOL..OMG..can it be??? did I read this and it stuck in my feeble mind.. say it ain't so???? |
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Re: In Sanity
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 15th January 2005 @ 11:12:12 PM AEST
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Geez, Nazzy - if you knew how many times I've been to this page, you'd probably tell me to forego the comment... for my consistent re-reading of this piece says much. I love this. Love this! I do so enjoy how you mind works --- and THIS... it's just fabulous. Poetically, intellectually, emotionally - all of it.
Funny... I have a feeling if my memory returned... he'd trash the place. Pity, too... as it's all I can do to keep it all neat and orderly. lol... yeh.
Wallowing in this... somewhere just below its surface,
SNM |
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Re: In Sanity
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 04:41:03 PM AEST
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Another example of the originality of your mind.
Very clever and very refreshing!!!!
To me the cleaning up is like trying to refresh the nmemory, recalling evry bit of it that you can...GREAT analogy!! |
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