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Oceans above while you're below
Contributed by
worldwise
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Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 02:06:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
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A thorn stuck in a cherry wine
that flows from your fingers
and bleeds from your lips
wrapped up in a velvet blanket
that whispers from your kiss
come up from cold depths
and help me feel those flames again
cause you never had a reason
to leave
Though our love was never a seed
I know that it was never meant to be
None of my dreams would leave me to believe
that i'd lose you to the ground
None of my tears can bring you back
and no love will come from it
Can't you see
It was never meant to be
You weren't supposed to leave
My angel in the ground
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2004-12-31 02:06:17]
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Re: Oceans above while you're below
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 02:20:27 AM AEST
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Wow...how could you say you're not good at poetry?!
I think this is great!...It's sad and heartbreaking, but a beautiful write nonetheless. I could feel the sadness in each line.
Awesome job. :-) |
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Re: Oceans above while you're below
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 05:59:31 AM AEST
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| i agree ur great at poetry and this is very touching....i felt so sad when i read the last two lines....."you werent supposed to leave, my angel in the ground." that is so beautiful and utterly sad, tears did well up. this was beautiful and im sorry for ur loss. keep it up! |
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Re: Oceans above while you're below
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 08:24:32 AM AEST
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I have to agree with the others, you seem to underestimate your gift
Well written and poignant
Thanks
Steve |
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Re: Oceans above while you're below
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by someone2004 on
Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 09:36:00 AM AEST
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| That was good. Don't underestimate your ability to write a poem that was really good. Sorry about your loss too. |
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Re: Oceans above while you're below
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by someone2004 on
Friday, 31st December 2004 @ 09:36:03 AM AEST
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| That was good. Don't underestimate your ability to write a poem that was really good. Sorry about your loss too. |
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