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Pathetic Me
Contributed by
Unwanted_Angel
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Saturday, 1st January 2005 @ 10:49:44 AM in AEST
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Feeling just alone , laughing faces to be shown .
Try to laugh , as I adjust my happy mask .
But time will show the world my lonely time to pass.
Mascara tears to join the pain .
The stains that water wont wash away.
Like drowning in my pool of blood.
My emotions again telling me as always to shut up .
It feels as if Im in this place , where worries and fears never
go away.
I should shut up now , Im wasting your time .
Ill go to sleep now , and be just fine .
Ill try to stop and do the rest.
If life is ever willing to show my second best
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2005-01-01 10:49:44]
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Re: Pathetic Me
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by rpnsk on
Saturday, 1st January 2005 @ 11:03:32 AM AEST
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Nice, I like the break in rhyme making the 'shut up' more poignant through the poem. My interpretation from this is that during the melancholy times in life, if we express and relese our emotions to their full extent, we can move on with life - but it isn't easy.
However, on the surface, it could be a more personal piece, and also that you were in this disappointed mood feeling that there is no one else on the outside who could listen.
As you come to the end of the poem, it seems to become more hopeful, but the last line brings ambiguity - what do you mean by 'if life is ever willing to show my second best' ? |
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Re: Pathetic Me
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by bonita2689 on
Saturday, 1st January 2005 @ 11:48:57 AM AEST
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| I really like this, I can't say exactly what about it but something really catches my eye. Great Post and welcome to YPDC |
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