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untitled
Contributed by
sidra
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Tuesday, 4th January 2005 @ 01:11:51 PM in AEST
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Youve been treating me unfair
And I dont know why
But its always at night
When I seem to cry
All I want are things to be fine
For me to be yours
And for you to be mine
Weve had our problems in the past
But that doesn'tt mean we cant make us last
Were a great couple if you give us a chance
But I need 100% of you cooperation
hope you understand what Im trying to say
Cause I need your love for me to stay
I love and miss you all the time
But I never feel like you are mine
So I ask you once more to treat me fair
Cause I'm not going to hurt you,again I wouldn't dare
I love you deeply my dearest Hafid
My life without you would be a sin
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sidra
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2005-01-04 13:11:51]
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Re: untitled
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by Ineedanap on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 03:44:55 AM AEST
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Pretty godd but heres some constructive criticism- little choppy. Try to make it smoother. It was Good though.
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