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Is It Just My Mind
Contributed by
dreaming-of-your-love
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Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 06:11:08 AM in AEST
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you look in my eyes and i start to cry
why is it everytime i try to say good bye
you look at me like i was dieing
i feel no pain in my heart
but in my head it starts all over again
the way i see myself is by your side
no matter the pain that has with in
know it is time to go with all your
lies that i know
your are the one that well be in my heart
but in my head in make no sense
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2005-01-09 06:11:08]
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Re: Is It Just My Mind
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 08:15:52 AM AEST
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Ok it could have been better..yOU SHOULD have checked your PUNCUATIONS!
It needed work. |
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Re: Is It Just My Mind
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by autumngreeneyes on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 01:10:21 PM AEST
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| Why is everyone using small case I's??? are you all trying to make a statement..and what's with no commas? is that a new poetic style? Editors are going to throw this right into the trash..or shoot it back at you..if they want to pay return postage..but they make you pay the return postage.. Maybe all you kids are trying to start a poets revolution?? No more grammer????? The last few poems I've looked at..lower case i s.. and no commas.. it's not just you.. but my good humor just ran out. Don't take this personally.. but wazzup dude??? |
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Re: Is It Just My Mind
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by emystar on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 10:58:22 PM AEST
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Another good write.
It's called poetic liscense to write any way u wish. I'm no kid and I don't always putuate etc. I do other things on this and other sites but sooner or later I will correct my mistakes.
Keep writing hon and don't let nuthin distract u.
luv huggs, smiles,
emy |
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