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All of Us
Contributed by
Jeff9Man
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Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 04:23:59 PM in AEST
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None who will, call
In darkness alone, I answer
My lifeblood and soul
None who will, take it all
Silence thunders dreams crash
None who will watch them fall
All who can, reach out their arms
In darkness alone, Im turned away
Head of numbers, heart of stone
All who can wait forever
Anger rules, fear reigns
All who can, take the pain
He who wont, can change
In darkness alone, I refuse
Demons hold dominion, reason flees
He who wont stands idle by
None, all and I rolled into one
He who wont will only run
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Re: All of Us
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by afterdark on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 04:26:12 PM AEST
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| This is not to bad.. |
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Re: All of Us
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by jjones12 on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 04:30:08 PM AEST
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Good. kinda confusing but good.
-Jen-
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Re: All of Us
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 05:37:29 PM AEST
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| You portrayed the sense of aloneness well, although I'm not sure what's causing it. It could use a little more expressing of who's "us". Cheers! |
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Re: All of Us
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by Jeff9Man on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 09:48:15 PM AEST
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Here is what this means:
first paragraph is talking about everyone in the world. No one notices, I offer everything I have, with no takers. Everyone watches as my dreams fall.
Secong paragraph is about me. I reach out to be turned away. My heart has hardened and all I have left is logic. I wait for it to change, but I can take it as long as I have to.
The last side is where I feel bullheaded. I could change, but I refuse to. I can't escape the demons of my past to take the logicaly less painful route. I watch it all happening to me and do nothing about it. I am a part of it all, but in the end, I will only run away from it. |
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Re: All of Us
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by Jeff9Man on
Sunday, 9th January 2005 @ 09:49:04 PM AEST
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| thanks for reading |
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