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Dreaming
Contributed by
stonedraider23
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Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 10:03:20 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Im here waiting
Youre no where to be found
Im left here wondering
Wondering and day dreaming about you
The way you laugh
Looking at your picture admiring your looks
Seeing you look back at me
Full of love
So much to offer
Dreaming of holding you
Dreaming of kissing you
Dreaming of loving you
Dreaming, hoping and praying I never lose you
If I lost you my life would not have a purpose
Picturing your face
So serious
So determined
Full of life and hope for her future
You renewed my dream
Replenished my hope
She made me wonder about my future
Dreaming about her helps me forget my problems
Dreaming about her eases my pain
Dreaming about her drowns all my fears
Dreaming helps me bring here to me
Her eyes, her skin
Wanting to feel her lips on mine
Living everyday as if she was here with me now
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Re: Dreaming
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by TaintedSoul on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 11:04:17 AM AEST
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Love has such a bizarre affect on the heart. One goes from images such as those written here then to panic without notice.
Small suggestion: 'She made me wonder about my future' would make a good opening line for a second stanza. Only since you went from 'you' to 'she' there. Nicely written otherwise!!
peace
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