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the sea
Contributed by
hughie610
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Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 02:03:04 PM in AEST
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Lifepoems
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the sea
the first day i wen't to sea i remember it wasn't july it was december the son of a seaman i expected to fare well but to me it was pure hell the high waves , the mist,and the fog was thick it's no wonder as a young man i got horribly sick some days were normal and we would see a whale but in the north atlantic the wind blew a gale we were on duty twenty hours each daya protecting the merchant ships on their way when the alarm went on in the middle of the night from your hammock you would run in full flight some depth charges were dropped while others we would catupult hoping to get the subamarines that were about sometimes the waves were thirty feet high and above was a very black sky when we returned to port and our duty was done it was now time to have some fun many people i met and became friends to be and a few are still out in the cold ,blue sea after three years of service i was finally free and i kissed the ground and danced with glee
author hewitt hardy august 1 2004
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Re: the sea
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th January 2005 @ 02:21:45 PM AEST (User
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Capitalize, watch spelling (submarines) and add some punctuation. But really, I love the tale it tells and this is a fine poem! Cheers! |
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Re: the sea
(User Rating: 1 ) by freckle on
Sunday, 17th April 2005 @ 01:35:04 PM AEST (User
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NIce poem. The flow is good and the descriptions paint a vivid picture. Good work.
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