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This Is A Happy Poem
Contributed by
Seikjo
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Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 10:09:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
happypoetry
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If you didn't know this is a happy poem.
It is the happiest poem in the world.
So do wine and complaine.
That the line do not ryme.
Who cares at the time.
Opps, i made a ryme so i take that line back.
Happy poem so happy my head wants to explode.
Great now i'm nothing but a bodyless head.
But I'm still happy!
Copyright ©
Seikjo
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2005-01-14 10:09:48]
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Re: This Is A Happy Poem
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 10:32:24 AM AEST
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| Can I complain about spelling? :-) No, it is nice to see something other than the usual. Cheers! |
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Re: This Is A Happy Poem
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 12:48:35 PM AEST
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There are quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes in here:
1) ryme is spelt wrong, it should be rhyme
2) "So do wine and complaine"
I think you mean..."So don't whine and complain":
3) Opps is Oops.
4) "That the line do not ryme"
"That the lines do not rhyme"
5) You might also want to put some
commas (,) in there after "Happy poem"
and "Great" and a question mark (?)
after "time"
6) If you didn't know this is a happy poem. (put a comma in there)
This is an example of very careless writing...
please proofread your work before posting it.
The point of the poem is rather good, but all the spelling and grammar mistakes detract from it severely for the reader. Take better care next time. |
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Re: This Is A Happy Poem
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by Sexygirl on
Sunday, 3rd October 2010 @ 03:44:45 PM AEST
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This is cute..it makes you laugh..well done
Keep up the good work...take care |
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