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Party Till It's Black
Contributed by
doodley_5
on
Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 08:12:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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I was at a party, a freshmen in college
A nice man begins to talk to me..
He holds a drink
He hands it to me..
I take a small sip..
because, hey.. it is a party
He urges me to take one more..
I drink the whole cup
I begin to feel cold and weary
The next thing I know, I am in a dark room
There is a candle lit
Thats all the light I have to see
I notice my arms and legs are tied to the floor and walls
I have blood all over my body
I see a rotting corpse in a corner
I begin to scream- but a pounding on the ceiling stops me
A large man walks down the stairs
Im scared for my life.. i dont know what he is going to do to me
I dont know what he has done to me...
I feel a sharp pain on my stomache
I notice I have a large scar
The man walks with a seringe
My heart begins to beat faster
Sweat is making all the cuts on my body sting
The smell in the room is unbearable
I begin to vomit...
The man yells something up the stairs..
He comes closer..
I feel a tiny prick in my neck
Colors of orange
Red
Grey
All fade in front of me
Then it all goes...
Black.
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Re: Party Till It's Black
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by Essentially9 on
Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 08:29:30 PM AEST
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| you brought a very good message to send to life. people are too trusting sometimes, and the people they trust are usually the ones they shouldnt. |
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Re: Party Till It's Black
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by Stonedraider23 on
Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 08:49:41 PM AEST
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| Freaky good write |
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Re: Party Till It's Black
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by O7NeVeS on
Friday, 14th January 2005 @ 09:24:49 PM AEST
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| Wow...great message in this poem. Nice write too. TD |
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Re: Party Till It's Black
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by Whisper on
Saturday, 15th January 2005 @ 03:48:53 PM AEST
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Hmmmm some party eh?
Its a haunting tale ,I was almost felt like I could have been there.
Whisper |
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Re: Party Till It's Black
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by daydreamer22 on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 02:33:44 PM AEST
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gah babi doll..you are dark..haha..i love it..good job babe..cyas later love ya
awaiting your next
!~*ME*~! |
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