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my story
Contributed by
visualizing_life
on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 08:45:42 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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this life is worthless
no time to spare
nothing to give
no on to care
this is my story
of despair and tradjedy
of death and hurt
of sumthing that couldve been
i couldve been great
i could have been happy
i could have done wonderful things
but not no more
and its all your fault
you made me feel bad
you made me feel like nothing
thanks for all your help
thanks for everything
you made me realize where i belong...
DEAD!
Copyright ©
visualizing_life
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2005-01-16 20:45:42]
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Re: my story
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by Kuro_Mirai on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 08:51:42 PM AEST
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| Ouch, thats harsh. It's still a great poem, though. Good job. |
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Re: my story
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by tractorbabe on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 08:56:21 PM AEST
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| awsome poem.....i like this one |
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Re: my story
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by xfrozenwindx on
Sunday, 16th January 2005 @ 09:53:26 PM AEST
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Wow, that is horrible. I hope you don't feel that way all the time. It was a great poem though, you put good feeling into that..Excellent write! Hope to see more of your poems.
-Ashley |
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Re: my story
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by little_genna on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 10:14:25 AM AEST
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aggression!
this poem is well expressed...
im not gonna say i understand ur hurt and pain but i have my own which feels simliar to the feeling i got from this
good write and please take care
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Re: my story
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 10:38:37 AM AEST
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| as a poem i think its awful. cheer up though, life isnt that bad. i used to feel down but im ok now. the world is beautiful. |
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Re: my story
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by wolfman on
Monday, 17th January 2005 @ 01:44:17 PM AEST
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being hurt by some one is very painful no matter who it is and these feelings come natural to many, the story of your end is the one that many people will read over again to see if there was some thing that they could have doen to stop nit or to find out if they caused it it is hard to get over being hurt like that being driven to that pointwhere no one is to help you come back but when you get there i hope you find your self and know that this is not the way .
this was a good poem you focused your pain to a single person that hurt you and you expresed it with such a talent this was very good, I am looking forword to readuing more of your work please. read you later.
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