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disappointed
Contributed by
ashleigh4
on
Friday, 6th December 2002 @ 03:20:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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when my blood pours from my veins
i press the blade
and wonder "am i happy?"
rubbing salt into my cuts
i hope that i will die, but
i know that i will live.
living is so painful,
an arduous way to die
lest i speed my execution...
will they find me
in a bath? in a bed? in a dream?
will they miss me
as they slowly die themselves?
can i start my death sentence?
string the words together,
to strangle my cries for help...
Copyright ©
ashleigh4
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2002-12-06 03:20:00]
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Re: disappointed
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 6th December 2002 @ 05:05:34 PM AEST
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Hey, Ashleigh this was a good poem. I've asked these questions asked in the poem many times myself. I love the last stanza the best. I can feel the pain in this poem so well.
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Re: disappointed
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by orgygirl on
Monday, 9th December 2002 @ 05:33:32 PM AEST
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Ashleigh, I really liked this write. I have to say my favorite stanza is :
will they find me
in a bath? in a bed? in a dream?
will they miss me
as they slowly die themselves
This really hit home, plus there's good imagery and a nice flow.Thank you for sharing.
Take care |
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