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Twisted Irony
Contributed by
akaimeridia
on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 07:31:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I've lived long enough
I'm saying goodbye
Forget what I look like
Don't take time to cry
I've accomplished so little
Fulfilled nothing more
This is the last time
I'll step though my door
I'm taking the knife
That I've hid for so long
Finally suicide seems right -
- Not wrong
Love was so cruel to me
Drove me insane
Incompetent joy
Unbearable pain
I hope I'm not selfish
My family's all right
Although I heard somebody
Crying last night
I've now slit my wrists
I'm starting to bleed
That warm, dizzy feeling
Is just what I need
But wait - what was that?
Did my mother just scream?
Does she know what I've done?
This is not how it seems
Blood trails behind me
I run down the hall
Only to stop short,
Stumble, and fall
My breath comes up short
My mother was crying
With horrified truth
I knew I was dying
And the last thing I saw
In his room near the shelf
Was the sight of my brother
Hanging himself
Copyright ©
akaimeridia
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2005-01-20 19:31:51]
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Re: Twisted Irony
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by tWiStLe on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 07:49:51 PM AEST
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| Omg.... i am in LOVE with this poem.... i just posted one of mine n saw yours was one of the most recent so i clicked onto it.... and... lol i can't find words.... you have a gift... i dont know how you do it... it flows perfectly... keeps its rhythm and even has a twist... it gave me an empty stomach... i wish i could write like this... to me it was beautiful.... (im still in awe... lol) |
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by hellsfallenangel on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 08:00:09 PM AEST
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interesting poem nice twist at the end it was real good well wish i could say more but i have one to post of my own bye
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Re: Twisted Irony
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by vampyrekiss on
Thursday, 20th January 2005 @ 09:06:18 PM AEST
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holly ***** this poem was kick ass :) no really i clicked it expecting not to like it (sorry) and it pulled me in then the end is like WOW ya know and theres so much emotion considering you dont even want to kill/harm your self :) anyway great write
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Re: Twisted Irony
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by Bohemian_with_a_pen on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 07:29:35 AM AEST
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| wow.... |
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Re: Twisted Irony
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by Tru2Myself on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 03:49:29 PM AEST
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Wow...This is so awesome. Like I was reading it and I was like WOW this is good. Then I got to the end and my stomache dropped...Like I am still in awe. Its amazing I dont even know how to say it...wow...love it. AWESOME. I dont know how you wrote something so amazing when you dont even feel that way
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Re: Twisted Irony
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by Dying_Angel on
Sunday, 23rd January 2005 @ 11:49:13 AM AEST
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| i've just sat in my chair for 10 minutes after that poem...absolutely incredible...Jen |
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Re: Twisted Irony
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by morgana on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 03:15:56 AM AEST
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wow...you hav major talent here....love this write....keep it up! might wanna try out for contests .... very strong poem!
keep it up! ;)
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Re: Twisted Irony
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by Dying_Angel on
Friday, 8th April 2005 @ 06:19:35 PM AEST
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| I know ive commented before but OMG this fantastic and at the same time soo bitterly painful poem always brings a tear (or rather a flood of them) to my eye this is excellent perfect i cannot love this more well done! Jenxx |
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