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STARING AT THE WATER
Contributed by
craz2
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Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 09:39:34 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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STARING AT THE WATER
HERE I SIT JUST STARING OUT THE WATER IS SO BLUE THE SOUND OF THE WAVES CRASHING BELOW THE SUN IS SETTING OFF IN THE DISTANCE THE SEA GULLS ARE PLAYING IN THE AIR THE LIGHTHOUSE IS BLINKING AND DRAWING ME NEAR IF ONLY YOU WERE HERE TO WALK WITH ME TO ENJOY THE LIGHT THE SMELLS THE SOUNDS THE SOFT SAND BENEATH MY FEET MY MIND IS WHIRLING WITH THOUGHTS OF ANOTHER TIME AND PLACE WHEN ALL STANDS STILL AND JUST THE TWO OF US ARE ALL THAT IS HERE TO ENJOY ALL THE BEAUTY AROUND TO ENJOY ALL WE HAVE TO GIVE TO ENJOY THE PEACEFULNESS THAT SURROUNDS JUST THE TWO OF US TO LOUNGE TOGETHER TO READ SOFTLY TO ONE ANOTHER TO FILL OUR DREAMS AND FANTASIES TO TALK LAUGH AND SHARE MAYBE SOON MY HEART WILL QUIT LONGING MAYBE SOON MAYBE TIME WILL BE MY FRIEND
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Re: STARING AT THE WATER
(User Rating: 1 ) by Stitch on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 10:40:11 AM AEST (User
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This was lovely, but could we give up the caps? They work great for a title or a few words here and ther, but when it's all caps, it's hard to read.
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Re: STARING AT THE WATER
(User Rating: 1 ) by dalamar on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 11:10:43 AM AEST (User
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There are no words to share is was Beautiful. |
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Re: STARING AT THE WATER
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 11:33:31 AM AEST (User
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This is sweet, but reading all caps is hard on the eyes. Cheers! |
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Re: STARING AT THE WATER
(User Rating: 1 ) by blowfish_jane on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 01:44:20 PM AEST (User
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Whats with all the caps? Overall the delivery of the poem was good, cool write.
Jane x |
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Re: STARING AT THE WATER
(User Rating: 1 ) by Jenni_K on
Friday, 21st January 2005 @ 02:55:22 PM AEST (User
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Beautiful write..Left me with a feeling of peace and tranquillity.. I think I'm going across to the beach..and stare at the water..
Thank you..
Jenni |
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