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The Most Dangerous Place
Contributed by
bigtig6269
on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 02:32:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Whats going on? This isnt the real world
Its dark and all the screams make my hair curl
Theres no bombing countries and no massive fires
Theres mythical creatures: werewolves and vampires
I try to stand up and walk around
But my feet arent even touching the ground
Flying around like one of Draculas bats
Oh man! Those are some real big cats
This cant be real, its all a big fake
All of a sudden the ground starts to shake
Emerging from the huge crevice in the ground
A huge creature rises up and looks around
I thought he had knives in his mouth, but they were just his teeth
With massive clawed hands, he pulled a sword from his sheath
Ten feet tall with a gold sword of five
Oh my God, am I really alive
Almost human looking, except for six hairy arms
It was easy to tell he could do some harm
Ive got to get away from this beast
Before he makes me part of a feast
Floating away, I hear his loud roar
I cant take this place anymore
Is this real? Im confused and dont know what to think
All of a sudden when my eye started to blink
It was on me with incredible speed
It was easy to tell I was about to become monster feed
It picks me up and raises me to its jaws
I squirm and kick but cant escape his claws
I have just enough time to realize that my life is through
Right as the monster easily bites me in two
Suddenly I wake up and see that Im fine
Now I know the most dangerous place is my mind
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2005-01-22 02:32:39]
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Re: The Most Dangerous Place
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by Stonedraider23 on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 04:49:32 AM AEST
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| good write lil long n odd but good |
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Re: The Most Dangerous Place
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 05:04:36 AM AEST
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I agree its a little odd, but definately the poem is good. You wrote it with so much feeling and thought to it, i enjoyed it tons.
Jane x |
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Re: The Most Dangerous Place
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by Rhymingron on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 06:39:50 AM AEST
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| This was great. You painted a vivid picture. |
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Re: The Most Dangerous Place
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 22nd January 2005 @ 07:41:15 AM AEST
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| Great poem! Did you describe your nightmare? :) |
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Re: The Most Dangerous Place
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by vanilla_flame on
Sunday, 30th January 2005 @ 09:50:43 PM AEST
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| very good write |
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Re: The Most Dangerous Place
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by Vampirequeen on
Sunday, 3rd April 2005 @ 03:56:38 AM AEST
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wow that is awsome i love it .
Its dark very dark.well done |
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Re: The Most Dangerous Place
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by Solmyr1404 on
Wednesday, 31st May 2006 @ 05:40:30 PM AEST
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| dude, this one is kind of wild....i love it.... |
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