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Rose Colored Rug
Contributed by
rxqueen
on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 10:06:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Oh god I'm slipping,
tripping,
falling,
but I hear your voice calling
from down the stairs
a faint hello?
but it lingers,
lingers low
the rail on the stairs it creeks
as you ascend,
I embrace unatural sleep
dipping in
dipping out
but when I dip in I hear you shout
panic in this room of mine
time will tell...
the time that binds
blinds down to block the light
far from right I do such deeds
fight no more you plea to me
but it was you who planted the seed
I tried to cut
cut it deep
let the pain, the anguish seep
onto my dirty rose colored rug...
hug me as I shake and shiver
baby you make my liver quiver
no not you this friend of mine
the one who takes me out of time
far away from this place
giving me my personal space
let me weep out of this core
there is more then flesh and bones
undertones and souls and eyes that hide forgotten lies!
go now my sweet
to your feet and down those stairs
who cares about me any way
today is my final day
please leave me be
just let me lay...
go now baby
go
a
w
a
y
.
.
.
.
.
.
We were never more then what the illusion thought up by "us" could have ever let us be.
Copyright ©
rxqueen
... [
2005-01-24 22:06:38]
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Re: Rose Colored Rug
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by killingmehslowly on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 10:47:34 PM AEST
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| I'm not quite sure what to think on this. It's definately different, but not in a bad way. I like it. I also like the random rhyming..but hey, that's me. |
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Re: Rose Colored Rug
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by DorianChambers on
Monday, 24th January 2005 @ 10:55:52 PM AEST
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let go of the doubt, this is beautiful, honest and with
plenty of thought provokin passages, worry not just write, like your style verry creative . . .
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Re: Rose Colored Rug
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by blowfish_jane on
Tuesday, 25th January 2005 @ 02:32:25 AM AEST
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Ohhh that was very good, it's creatively writen.
I liked the flow and rhyming pattern it suited the write well.
Nice poem Jocelyn.
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Re: Rose Colored Rug
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by Spazzo on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 09:40:04 PM AEST
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I like this. Very cool style.
Spazzo |
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Re: Rose Colored Rug
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 12th April 2005 @ 03:11:58 PM AEST
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Whats nice about this piece is that it feels like it poured out of you, unforced, like it needed to be.
I love the stuff that comes flooding out....great job!!! |
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