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Words to the Wind
Contributed by
fionndruinne
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Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 04:41:22 PM in AEST
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I walked in the dark of trees
As leaves came fluttering down
In the force of a wind from the east
As cold and hard as a broken life.
I wondered at the way of many
Who wander always in this wind
Grasping ever at straws
And never the lasting things,
Ever forcing their fates forward
Forsaking the gifts of the present.
Hear me, heart of the wind –
Do you style yourself a master at game
Rather than another’s piece
On a board of another’s making?
For these people do.
Distorting the deeds of this life
They deem it a game of their own
As if every man against another
Could be called a universe.
Remember the rules of the game:
Each of us is but a piece
Carved carefully into this form
Each with a destined move to make
To bring about a victory.
Do not desire the winning move
For that piece has no more glory
Than all those that went before;
Nor seek the move of another
For a pawn is not lowlier than a knight
When his place is right…
The wind remembered this
For it travels lonely paths often enough
To muse upon what it sees.
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fionndruinne
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by faith_my_eyes on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 05:01:30 PM AEST
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Andrew, good to hear from you. I have missed your writing.
Your are becoming a master wordsmith. This is an excellent artful poem. I liked this line in particular:
"Each of us is but a piece
Carved carefully into this form
Each with a destined move to make
To bring about a victory.
I think here you have beautifully and brilliantly alluded to the Master Craftsman and Master Player.
Blessings,
Em
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by emystar on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 05:19:03 PM AEST
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yeah, long time no see.
Keep writng your awesome masterpeices of wisdom.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 05:32:50 PM AEST
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"Grasping ever at straws
And never the lasting things,
Ever forcing their fates forward
Forsaking the gifts of the present."
Probably my favorite line...something about the way it sets the rest up to stick in your mind...
Very wise, but most of all, a gift because of the mastery behind it. |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 27th January 2005 @ 05:38:55 PM AEST
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wow this write is awsome.
beautiful. |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by yellow_sundragon on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 12:55:22 AM AEST
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Thank you, Andrew...
I'm musing on "purpose", everywhere I turn I'm confronted with the idea of "purpose".... this is a stunning masterpeice to the thought of "purpose"...
Jaime |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by eatfresh22 on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 01:50:12 AM AEST
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I hope I am not one of the ones you've been around.....hahahaha. Nicely done Andrew. I'm glad that you have not lost your inspiration of nature now that you are in wretched California with me. It's good to see that you are writing, and the topic helps me remember why you are such a good friend. Okay, I'll see you soon. (I never could say that before...maybe there is something good about you being in California)
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Tanmaya on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 04:41:23 AM AEST
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Great, as always.
I specially liked the first stanza.
'I wondered at the way of many
Who wander always in this wind
Grasping ever at straws
And never the lasting things,'
So true- in today's world especially...
where things of eternal worth are so neglected
for what is transient and fading.
I loved the last three lines,
they leave you musing, with the wind...
All in all, very profound words... meaningul and wise.
Bravo!
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 28th January 2005 @ 06:28:22 PM AEST
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Andrew! Oh! I've missed your poems! This is fantastic.
Unfortunatly, I see some of myself in this, but that is changing. I am changing.
Anyway, like I said. Fantastic. I find myself falling into your words yet again. And now, I kinda wish I didn't have to leave.
Never stop writing, K?
*hugs tons and tons*
Phil xxx |
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 03:33:57 PM AEST
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Awesome, Andrew. You are so wise in His ways for one so young. I feel certain He has incredible plans for you.
Stitch |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 03:54:38 PM AEST
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beautifully written, so meaningful and a true joy to read:) hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 05:53:43 PM AEST
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And you're no longer on the farm ?
Forgive me if I sound a little confused, but this is more significant a write than all your previous. It speaks of more than just your voice . . . I just don't know that much of you to correlate this prowess.
It is something worth remembering. |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Elizabeth_Dandy on
Thursday, 24th February 2005 @ 11:47:38 AM AEST
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Andrew! Hello!
I have finally found your masterpiece. (Computer was whacky and got it fixed)
I just echo all of the above. Love every line of this splendid piece of poetry.
Yes, people are clutching at straws and fail to see it is the PRESENT moment that counts.
Use "Free Speech"
well while the moment lasts.
And yes, we are all a piece of the great EMSEMBLE and it matters what we contribute - that's what we are on earth for.
Thank you for this brilliant piece.
AD MAJOREM DEI GLORIA
Elizabeth Dandy |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 27th February 2005 @ 05:24:58 PM AEST
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It's baffling... mind-boggling...
Not the poem, but...
YOU...
You're so wise and smart and pensive and...
all of that shows in this lovely creation of a poem.
What else can I say?
Well done.
Lots of love and peace be with you,
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 4th March 2005 @ 05:51:16 PM AEST
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probably said it before and i'm gonna say it again andrew you are the king of deep thought, we are not worthy.
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 29th March 2005 @ 07:25:20 PM AEST
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We all get something different, I think when we read another's poetry. I saw my father playing chess and me frowning and being terribly impatient.
This is a well constructed poem worthy of very high praise.
And I wonder about the wind, as I often do.
Kie |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Wachumiri on
Monday, 2nd May 2005 @ 08:56:55 PM AEST
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Very well written... AGAIN! Oh well, what can be done? We must just wait for the next masterpiece, I guess.
Take care, David |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th May 2005 @ 02:23:44 PM AEST
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You are a true knight, Andrew.
"Do you style yourself a master at game
Rather than another’s piece
On a board of another’s making?
For these people do."
I just love that part. (Normally I wouldn't put the whole stanza in the comment, but this is just so well put.)
I really love this one best so far I think.
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Kie on
Friday, 24th June 2005 @ 05:21:18 AM AEST
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I know its not proper etiquette to post a second comment on a poem but............
This one is my favorite and I always read it first and then "Heart of Light" I believe thats the name. Those two I immediately read almost as if my mind's relays don't realize that i've read them a zillion times now!
I think this is your deepest and most beautiful poem yet. I love it.
Kie |
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th August 2005 @ 06:55:01 PM AEST
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Excellent job, well done Andrew..
And also, evidencing from your experience here shows a valuable lesson, how you are teaching one to reach out..and not wander in the wind forever..
Your write directs and shaping feelings, in turn giving form to one's emotional and intellectual field, that needs to be met...
Nice wisdom write..
I especially like how you use the wind as the teacher.. with your excellent speakers voice.
The beginning.. sets the scene beautifully.... moves the curious to read the entire piece..
*****I walked in the dark of trees
As leaves came fluttering down
In the force of a wind from the east
As cold and hard as a broken life.
I wondered at the way of many
Who wander always in this wind
Indeed passing on your brilliant wisdom here also, sharing your explorational field of experience..
*****Hear me, heart of the wind –
Do you style yourself a master at game
Rather than another’s piece
On a board of another’s making?
For these people do.
The final observation posted at the close really sums up the whole write..
*****The wind remembered this
For it travels lonely paths often enough
To muse upon what it sees.
Thank you ... Marvelous writing here my friend
RLPoetess ; ))
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Archie on
Saturday, 3rd September 2005 @ 12:35:18 PM AEST
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| This poem is great advice for those trying to find their place. |
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by WAE on
Monday, 17th October 2005 @ 02:42:08 PM AEST
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I love it. The only proper comment I can produce.
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by Lilly-Quill on
Monday, 10th April 2006 @ 08:58:40 PM AEST
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“To bring about a victory.
Do not desire the winning move”
Very interesting, for we can stand tall without standing on someone, and we can be a victor without having victims. Even as Louis L’Amour once said: “Victory is won not in miles but in inches; win a little now, hold your ground, and later, win a little more.”
Now if Jesus talked to the trees, of course, I reckon we can talk to the wind. This is quite an informative muse of spiritual magnitude, brilliantly ascribe.
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Re: Words to the Wind
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by sararose1950 on
Friday, 12th May 2006 @ 06:53:27 PM AEST
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oh my!! what a beautiful, stunning piece.The title caught my eye because of my love of the wind *smiles* so glad it did!! Great wisdom is found in your words
Peace and Light
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