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My Star
Contributed by
noone
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Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 02:22:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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Star light
Star bright
The 15th star I see tonight
I wish I may
I wish I might
I once again wish for light.
This small cupboard hurts me so.
I am cramped as small as I can go.
The crack in the wall, I squint to see,
Its the brightest star over all the debris.
It will come soon, I know it will.
The light I long for, the new dawn chill.
As it approaches, the fear grows inside
Of what may lie in my daily chide?
But it doesnt matter, not as long as I can see the light.
Too long have I faced the dark, holding up this endless fight
From Dusk till dawn
I worry on, becoming known as Satans spawn.
Too numb to care I carry on searching for my star when all hope is gone.
Star light
Star bright
The last star I will see tonight
I wish I may
I wish I might
Survive these last few seconds of my life, just to see the last shine of my star
While the door slowly swings ajar.
Copyright ©
noone
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2005-01-31 14:22:46]
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Re: My Star
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by afterdark on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 02:27:46 PM AEST
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| I liked this..Darkness can always be found in light..For without darkness there can be no light..You have talent. |
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Re: My Star
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by dream_protector_bp on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 05:29:55 PM AEST
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i agree with the 1st comment. you do have talent and it shows through your writing.
i love it.
dp-bp
-barry |
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Re: My Star
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by shelby on
Monday, 31st January 2005 @ 09:12:57 PM AEST
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cant have one without the other hold on and survive the last seconds for they will go on to more shining stars......sorry Im rambling this is a great poem
Michelle |
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Re: My Star
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by shadowed_soul on
Tuesday, 1st February 2005 @ 03:44:23 PM AEST
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Hi Kirsty,
Another good poem. Good vocabulary and is nice to read. I'm going to read the other ones now. Way to go gal!
Melissa xx |
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Re: My Star
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 07:17:47 PM AEST
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| Excellent write. Awesome flow. Great job. |
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