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Plaster
Contributed by
AgeOfAquarias1960
on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 07:50:57 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Through beady hollows woven in that skull
a vacant line of sight draws from seeping soul
to lustless sheen of cracking plaster
as mind rolls to droning oblivions of drolling pastor
and in the creeping patterns of that ceiling
revelations withheld under paint presently peeling
wandering thought sifts drifting dust grain
weighing massless granules still to heavy for the sane
brimming repititions in echoing mind
sing and dance under apocalypse sky with their kind
cover the world in plastic and leave the silver to rust
humanity devoured by ignorance and here the remaining crust
left over from communion bread as tired church bell rings
deflecting low tones underfoot while swaying choir sings
beneath pew rousing dust stirs filling hollow rays
deadstill in the silenced sound basking in cold haze
parted by breath of spindled fingers thoughtfully grasping out
whispered away into windtides ancient route
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2005-02-03 19:50:57]
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Re: Plaster
(User Rating: 1 )
by bonita2689 on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:09:14 PM AEST
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| My goodness your vocabulary is overwhelming, although this is an excellent sounding piece, I do think it is a bit too much for the average reader too take in, maybe you should chop it down a bit but keep the intensity. Otherwise this is an astounding lovely piece of work. Nicely done. |
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Re: Plaster
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by Essentially9 on
Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 08:40:31 PM AEST
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| i say leave the average reader in the dust. people need to be educated. wonderful poem, and dont change your poems for those of lesser caliber. |
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