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Unwilling Lover
Contributed by
ForeverAlone
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Thursday, 3rd February 2005 @ 11:27:21 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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You're face is Engaved in my memory Forever burning In my soul The flames grow higher A black fire Eating away at me As a whole
My eyes are wide open and I question My existence While looking at the veiw A cross I am nailed to This cross is you But you will not be Of any assistance You leave me here Hanging, Bleeding, Swinging with the wind
My body is numb My soul is slowly leaking away My blood is dripping My life is slipping And there is nowhere to go The veiw is to good To leave I need one thing to live And you are what I need to hold To love To cherish To be with forever But My life has Lost it's luster You took My life My Unwilling Lover
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ForeverAlone
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Re: Unwilling Lover
(User Rating: 1 ) by O7NeVeS on
Friday, 4th February 2005 @ 12:17:01 AM AEST (User
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wow pretty intense...i like how u compared it to being nailed on the cross! I can def. relate.. Great write, good luck...TD |
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Re: Unwilling Lover
(User Rating: 1 ) by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 08:41:20 PM AEST (User
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Wow, very good stuff here. Just a few spelling mistakes which you may wanna fix. But all in all, a very great write.
"Engaved" -- "Engraved"
"veiw" - "view"
"you're" - "your"
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Re: Unwilling Lover
(User Rating: 1 ) by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 5th February 2005 @ 10:02:37 PM AEST (User
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i just realized why i like your poems so much. well there are more than just this reason, but anyway. i realized that all of your poems have a different type structure with use of rhymes and stanza. variety is a good thing, and not many poets can master is successfully, but you do. |
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