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The Girl on the Floor
Contributed by
lilschizoboy07
on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 04:09:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
DreamsandWishes
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This white girl laying on the floor
I stand next to
then kneel beside
and jam next to
listening to rock from out of my head
We're both on the floor
the carpet's our bed
We're next to a bookcase
full of glowing Harry Potter
(That girl on the couch looks so forlorn...)
now I feel like a rotter.
I feel close to this girl
like I've known her forever
I put my arm around her
contact she doesn't sever
I stroke her side absentmindedly
like I could feel her warmth forever
But then I wake up
Now I'm trying not to forget her.
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lilschizoboy07
... [
2005-02-06 16:09:26]
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Re: The Girl on the Floor
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 04:23:22 PM AEST
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| lol nice little twist at the end of ur author's note. This gave u a sense of the ability of dreams to be surreal to an extent, and you did this gurl justice. Keep it up |
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Re: The Girl on the Floor
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by Spazzo on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 04:57:35 PM AEST
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Awesome poem, a cool twist to it.
Scott |
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Re: The Girl on the Floor
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Sunday, 6th February 2005 @ 06:52:51 PM AEST
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| I liked this. alot. good stuff |
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