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Internet Love
Contributed by
opusmind
on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 11:16:26 AM in AEST
Topic:
InternetLove
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when you were not online
it wasn't so fine
I was longing you so much
that we'd catch the sun shine
the dream i wrote you did you reveal
I packed that latter with real hot kiss seal
I wrote you that I've been missing you
ti's true darling I am not lying to you
our unborn unseen were asking me
when will our mother visit us to see
I was tongue tight in front of them
I couldn't do any thing but a damn'
how's been everything out there? I asked
come meet me remove that hidden mask
I accept I drew your face in dream
your body with chocolate N' your skin with cream
I tasted your lips with a gentle style
and there was on your face a sweet smile
our dremland is empty with you
come home, make our dream come true
I am ass alone as you without me
set the date and have a cup of tea
meet somewhere we can spend some time
whether you'd order tea or lime
I ain't that good as I wanted to be
but I know something I know I'd be
I'd be the best father of our yet un seen ones
we'll have more masti and more fun
I'd be the best friend for ever and ever
that you'd find in world no or never
and in the end,
I'd be the best husband and a love
to tell you how much I love you, this can't cover
the page can tell you the words only
N' without you my darlin' I'm alone and lonely.
Copyright ©
opusmind
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2005-02-07 11:16:26]
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Re: Internet Love
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 12:53:53 PM AEST
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| Quite a few misspellings, but this poem has really good bones! Suggest you remove the spaces between the lines for easier reading as well. As to the poem itself, it strikes me as heartfelt and very desiring. Lovely write. Cheers! |
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Re: Internet Love
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 04:38:39 PM AEST
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| this is beautiful... thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Internet Love
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by Moe on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 02:32:06 PM AEST
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| nice, happens all the time. |
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